The Annex Reviews, January 1999

1/12/99 The Brewster Boys and Santa (J. O. Dickerson); Flash (Waldo); Cafe Leopold (Leo Sanderson); Touching Honor (Trisha); Love's Eternal Circle (Caeser); The Collar (N. M. Hawthorne)

1/15/99 Justice Club: Part 7 - The White Queen (by Yenoc and Superhero); Kind of Blue (Tiramisu); Cotten Dresses (P.D. James); Chambers Conference (Marc Tremaine); Tight Security (Nick)

1/25/99 Zhentilar Boys (The Storyteller); Cthrag Drusta (by PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa); Picard in the Garden (Ascem Noone); Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished) (Skayda Lee); Didi on the Cross (Tarquinius Rex); The Secret Side of the Street, Part One (Hyne T'hcalla)

1/31/99 Primal Duty (Monocle); Teaching the Twins (Mr. Spraycan); An Unsent Letter (PleaseCain); Thrasher Girls (Ronnie B); Bringing Home the Boss (Lambchop); Website Review: November Tuesday


1/12/99


The 1998 Cyrrheal Awards are out! Check my website (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh) to see the results.

A few other matters have been pointed out to my attention. One is that the ASSM newsgroup seems to temporarily disabled. Permanently? I hope not. It was the best place on the net to find all sorts of porn, hundreds of stories weekly, and it is gone or good it will be a sad day indeed for writers and readers. Not to mention reviewers. So I will posting on ASS, ASSGM, and ASSD in the meantime. And to my site as well.

I have also been informed that despite what I said in my Neterotica Address fanfic sites have been having as hard a time as porn sites as far as closures are concerned. Some of these sites aren't even that explicit; they are being shut down for only mentions of homosexual relationships between the characters in otherwise fairly innocent stories. Such censorship may get worse. I hope not.



The Brewster Boys and Santa [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 12/17/98
Author: Dream Spinner
Address: authorsix@hotmail.com

This is one of the most cheerfully perverted stories I've ever read. Santa visits the house of the Brewster boys, who've been very naughty this year: "First, there had been the lipping off to parents and teachers that applied to all four boys. Then there had been the toad left in Bobby's teacher's desk. The picture Benny had drawn on the chalk board of Mr. Carsley sucking cock and had then covered with the roll-up map had drawn a lot of laughs from his classmates." But they don't stop there. When Santa comes down the chimney, they leave drugged brownies for him to eat, then rape the old guy. I won't repeat it here, save it was very real and very detailed. If you've wondered exactly how a gang of prepubescents would sexually assault Santa Claus, this is it. Oh, and they tape it, too, to ensure they get better presents next Christmas.

Is nothing sacred? At least Santa enjoyed it.



Flash [A+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 12/19/98
Author: Waldo
Address: MelLin6695@aol.com

This was about the best TG story I've read so far and I'll go so far to say that it might even turn out as one of this year's (1999) best. Yes, I know it was posted LAST year, but my review is THIS year, and that's what counts.

The story is a loving spoof of the old "Flash Gordon" movie serials with Dale Arden, Flash, Dr. Zarkov, and Ming the Merciless. The tone is the respectful one of a true fan, more of a homage and less of a spoof; you won't find any wicked satire here. The premise is this: after an adventure on the planet Mongo Dale has been left near death, so Dr. Zarkov uses a murp ray to fuse her life-force with Flash's as a means of keeping her alive. Unfortunately, this has the effective of transforming virile blonde Flash into pretty little Dale at regular 29-hour intervals. (Wisely, this has been kept from Earth publicity hacks.) But Flash never ceases pining for Dale, whose comatose body Ming still holds, and he and Zarkov return to Mongo to find the murp ray to set things right again. Along the way they pick up a horny cook from a wrecked spaceship who gives Dale/Flash no end of trouble, and machinations by Ming's men result in dire straits for the heroes as Flash, in his female form, is brainwashed by a "tractor-grazer" ray to be Ming's sex slave and renamed Ambrosia. He's to work in tandem along with another Dale clone named Moesia, as Ming the Merciless announces:

Last night, one of the most beautiful women in the world..nay, in the universe, made love to me. She sucked me... she fucked me... she made me a very happy and drained man. Tonight Moesia will join Ambrosia..that's what I call my new little playmate. She's the best tasting pussy that I've ever licked. Ambrosia..pussy nectar good enough for the gods. Tonight Moesia will join Ambrosia and me in my bed. I'll see what it's like to be fucked and sucked by the two most beautiful twins in the universe. You must hurry up and restore the real Miss Arden to being normal so that I can see what it's like to make love to triplets. God, just thinking about triplets in my bed gets me hard.

Moments later, Dr. Zarkov sees the transformation for himself:

The door opened, allowing a very naked Dale Arden- looking woman entered the lab. Only this very natural looking woman wasn't walking timidly nor acting hesitantly as the last time that Zarkov saw the transformed and brainwashed Flash Gordon. The naked woman who walked into the room, was radiating pure sex appeal several ways. In the way that she walked, in the way that she held her naked breasts thrust out, in the way that she slinked across the floor like a world class seductress, in the sultry expression on her perfect face, and most importantly in the fathomless deepness of her sexy eyes.....She ignored everything in the room as she smiled at the object of her attention - the very beaming Emperor Ming. The woman disregarded normal protocol and didn't kneel as she approached him. Instead, she walked confidently toward him as if they were equals. Quickly crossing the room, she stepped next to Ming as she seductively spread her thighs around him and guided his hand to her breast. She tilted her head up and held her lips waiting for his kiss as if she was a woman with her man in the privacy of their honeymoon suite.

After more adventures the heroes and heroines eventually escape, in various states of transformation from male to female, leaving Ming's palace in flames. There was lots of hot, literate sex, some sly humor, and some very thoughtful speculation on how a man might act while trapped in a woman's body, or deal with the results of it afterward. Even better, the story didn't dwell on clothing, hairstyles, and female mannerisms the way TG fiction often does, elements which can get tiresome for those of us are who already female.

Even if you don't like TG stories give this one a try, especially if you're a fan of SF or the old cliffhangers.



Cafe Leopold (Lunch with Mona) [B]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 12/19/98
Author: Leo Sanderson
Address: leonsan@rocketmail.com

A woman goes to have lunch with a bunch of girlfriends in a cafe, where she orders a "Club Sandwich and an iced coffee.....and a Bare Kitty Shave." Soon the seat drops away beneath her booth and unseen attendants shave her snatch. Naturally, the wait staff is male and all the customers female, and they have orgasms between bites of lunch.

This was more of a vignette than a story; it couldn't have carried a plot by itself. Still, it was mildly amusing.



Touching Honor [A-]
Where posted: SSBB
When posted: 12/14/98
Author: Trisha
Address: trishah@teleport.com
Website: http://www.munchltd.com/storytyme/

At a play party a man observes a woman he knows is a sub- -she's collared--perform a slow striptease and lie on the couch. She spreads her legs and begins to masturbate as she fantasizes about her master:

She moves her index finger just little...touching more directly on the hood.....the wetness creeping up from her pussy....making her slick....as her finger moves effortlessly... She cradles her breast in her other hand, her fingers finding the nipple to softly pinch as she sees herself spread on that table. She can almost feel the bite of the cold, metal clover clamps pressed against her nipples as she lays on the table in her fantasy...She sees him enter the room behind her....the paddle clear in his hand...and pinches her nipple harder as she feels the smooth, cool surface of the paddle. The smacks start out softly.....almost gently and then increase in their hardness as he continues. And then the whacks are exploding on her bottom.

In the end it transpires the man is actually videotaping her performance as a Christmas present for her master, who is out of town. The "honor" in the title comes from his refusal to touch the exquisite feast that he records.

This story was pretty hot and I liked it, as I like most well- written, romantic BDSM, but the play-acting of the characters annoyed me after a while. Would the woman obey her "master" if he told her to jump off a bridge? How about if he told her to get a boob job? Or turn over her credit cards? Yeah, yeah, I know it's a matter of trust between them, they're living a lifestyle, they're fulfilling deep secret parts of themselves that ordinary folks are too ignorant to be aware of, etc. etc. But what it all comes down is no better than a game of Dungeons and Dragons, with real dungeons.



Love's Eternal Circle [A+]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 12/23/98
Author: Caeser
Address: caesar69@my-dejanews.com
Website: http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/Caesars_Archive_Collection/www/

This story was one of the better wifeslut ones I've read, written in Caeser's rock-steady first person persona. After a year of marriage a husband discovers his modest, ladylike, upper-crust wife is not all she appears to be: she loves rough sex, being dominated, and taking it in the ass. He obliges her, and we gradually discover that the hints of it were there all along: she was a total slut who was getting her sub thrills from adulterous liaisons outside the marriage bed. Disgusted, the narrator sells her off (slave trading being alive and well in sex stories) and finds another lover. But it happens that this modest, gentle lady has a secret side as well...and the cycle continues.

Not having read Caeser's work before, I found it very good, showing a writer in full command of his craft. The story didn't take sides; D/S was presented as neither good nor bad, healthy or unhealthy, it simply is, and the author used it in an ironic way to point out that if we don't change ourselves, we continue to attract the same people over and over. An excellent read.



The Collar [B]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 12/23/98
Author: N.M.Hawthorne
Address: mccolley@clover.net

Jasmine informs Pat she has a new boyfriend who has given her a shiny metal collar to wear. Pat just has to see this for herself. She looks in through the keyhole as the two have a D/S fetish play session, where she discovers the boyfriend is really a woman. She's discovered and runs, but later receives a package containing the same sort of collar which a mysterious pheromone perfume compels her to put on. After drinking some of her Jasmine's breast milk the transformation is complete:

[She] touched the mask to her face she felt a disturbance in her outfit. She dropped her hands and looked in the mirror. The mask had already began to adhere to her face, but what happened next shocked her then filled her with joy. The suit came alive. It began to ooze over her uncovered parts, as if someone had opened a can of oil and poured it over her the space between her shoulders and gloves covered in an instant. The tops of the boots began to creep up as the bottoms of the hot pants began to flow down, meeting at the middle of her thigh to form a solid mass. The suit flowed over the locks making them disappear. The boning lines of her corset were suddenly just gone. The mask came alive next flowing its way around her head, pushing her lush read hair into a tight ponytail on top of her now slick black shiny head. In the mirror Pleasure Slave_15 now saw a completely new person.

As stories go, the writing in this one was slightly below average, but it read quickly enough so that it wasn't annoying. There were more than a few incredulous moments in the plot (what friend breaks into another's house to spy on her and her boyfriend?) but of course that's par for the course in porn. Still, these twists could have used more bolstering. No surprises here, with the ending--the two newly transformed sex slaves climbing into the limo that takes them to their new lives--being fairly typical too.


1/15/99


Where is ASSM? What is going on with it? I used to get a lot of my material from that newsgroup. If it's gone, I'll have to work a lot harder. Can anyone out there give me the scoop?


Justice Club: Part 7 - The White Queen [B-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/8/99
Author: Yenoc and Superhero
Address: yenoc@ccia.com

There's always a certain guilty pleasure to be found in trash, and this story was trash, plain and simple, of the hypnotized-women-thoroughly-degraded-in-a-strip-club sort. The degradation is for the benefit of men, or one man, who orchestrates the performances via his skill at mind control. I can't tell you how many times I've come across this scenario. In this case the women are comic book superheroines, which is again par for the course, and the acts are on the sadistic, doggy, and lesbian domina side. The White Queen, the nominal heroine of the story, is inspired to masturbate by all the shenanigans: "Her right hand fluttered up and cupped a ripe tingling breast and she squeezed the hardened nipple, feeling it leap into even greater erection at her demented caress."

The author(s) of this story seemed to be bored with plebian words like labia and vagina, preferring novel creations like cuntlip, cuntal furrow, cuntal channel, cuntal heat, and wildly stretched cuntal hole, apparently not realizing the word cuntal doesn't exist. (For porn, the accepted colloquial adjective in cases like this is pussy.) But the main problem with a story like this is it's so pointless. A bunch of women are fucked, degraded, and turned into sex slaves; big deal. There's nothing new or novel about it, nothing gets resolved, and there weren't even any comic book fisticuffs, bombs about to go off, or hair-raising rescues. If you like hypnotized-woman-thoroughly- degraded-in-a-strip-club stories you might like this, but if you don't, I'd strongly recommend you pass.



Kind of Blue [A-]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 12/20/98
Author: Tiramisu
Address: Tiramixu@yahoo.com

This piece was more of a haiku than a story, a short mood piece about a man who binds himself to his bed and fantasizes about his lover teasing him sexually. The neat thing about it was that apart from the mention of "my tie" the narrator could have been male or female, and the lover male or female, which could have made it one of the few truly ambiguous sex stories I've read.



Cotton Dresses [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/10/98
Author: P.D. James
Address: pdmichael@hotbot.com

This story, which I'm guessing takes place in the 50s, is about a young man's sexual initiation by his aunt, brought about by his love of the loose-skirted, tight-bodiced cotton dresses on the female form:

I've always loved cotton dresses. All of the women wore them where I grew up. Soft clingy dresses that molded around the thighs when they walked and swished with the movement of their hips. You could never tell whether they had pants on or not because the cotton kept their secret.

He gets in trouble with one young girl when he touches her breast, which leads to tension between himself and the aunt who is taking care of him. But they talk their troubles out in a frank discussion about masturbation, and then-- surprise!!--she shows him a thing or two with her hands:

'I've never watched a young guy jerk off,' she confided. Her soft hand slid beneath my balls, holding them like fragile crystal. 'Is that what the guys call it now? Jerking off?'

'Yes,' I hissed.

This story was explicit but sweet, a little unstructured, but with lots of nostalgia for an earlier, more innocent time. And then there are those cotton dresses. I'm fond of wearing them myself.



Chambers Conference [A+]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/11/98
Author: Marc Tremaine
Address: tremaine@mindspring.com

The last story I read by this author was "Quest," a fantasy about two warriors and the dragons they hunt. It won a Cyrrheal Award, and deservedly so, but this story was even better, and about a world no less exotic: that of law. In a small-town courthouse (with a decidedly Atticus Finch flavor) a court battle is being fought. The narrator is a smartass lawyer from the big city, and he and the distinguished local judge are constantly duking it out on the floor. After one too many objections the judge calls him into his chamber for a private conference, which I guess is normal in courts of law. But what a surprise the lawyer gets when he finds the judge's two aides, one of which is the judge's son, ready to fuck him, and the tall, distinguished judge joins in later himself.

This story was as gleefully perverted as "Santa and the Brewster Boys" and gave no quarter at all to the dignified positions of those in the law profession. If you're one of those people who are convinced lawyers are out to screw everyone, well, you're right. After you read this, I guarantee you will never watch "Perry Mason" or any courtroom drama with a straight face again.



Tight Security [A]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/11/98
Author: Nick
Address: nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk

If this story has a theme song, it would be the Beatles' "Eleanor Rigby."

A fat. balding security guard barely looks up from his newspaper when a cleaning lady comes to vacuum. But when she lets him know she wants to have sex, he's more than eager. Afterwards she wait for a kind word, a final touch. But he has nothing to give. The pair go on their separate ways, the encounter heartbreaking for the insignificance of it all.

This story is the second story by Nick I've read, and it's a great improvement over the first, showing a writer who has found a unique voice. Altogether, a thoughtful exploration of the quiet desperation of everyday lives.


1/25/99


Hi there.

Here's some more reviews on the latest stories I've found of interest. I am also pleased to say The Lady Cyrrh website has been mentioned in "Hot Off the Net: Erotica and Other Sex Writings from the Internet," a compilation of erotic poems and stories published by Black Books. The official website for the book is http://www.mindpollen.com/hotn and it, as well as many other things these days, can be ordered from Amazon.com.

It just keeps getting bigger and bigger...

Among other news, the ASSTR server is going to be down for a month or so due to server problems, and the BitBard site will be down for the near future as well. Is anyone up to filling the gap? The BDSM and Treksmut communities have well-organized, stable, server sites, I can't see why the folks in ASS can't too.

I also would like to reiterate my policy for website listings on my links page. Such sites must be noncommercial or semicommercial, semicommercial meaning the page is out to sell you something (a book, fetish gear, the services of a dominatrix, etc.) but that there is also plenty of *interesting, quality* fiction available there for free to balance out the sins of X-rated commercialism. Sorry, including one or two sorry stories doesn't cut it. Neither do I list sites of the "Hi, I'm Mary Sue Smith from Tulsa Oklahoma and here are photos of my cats, some Garth Brooks tunes, and my erotic stories--" the said erotic stories reading exactly the same as hundreds of other people's erotic stories. Quality, originality, and sincere attempts at writing only, please.


Zhentilar Boys [A/A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/8/99
Author: The Storyteller
Address: mail@boytales.com

Cthrag Drusta [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/18/99
Author: PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa
Address: hiflame77@aol.com

I'd estimate there are over 100,000 pieces of fanfiction available on the web today. Most are related to TV shows and movies. But there is also a rapidly growing subgenre of fanfics based on fantasy novel series, of which the following two stories are an example.

"Zhentilar" is based on the Forgotten Realms, an imaginary kingdom under copyright to TSR, Inc. to serve as a setting for role-playing adventures, though it has spawned many novelizations as well. The story follows the adventures of a slave trader on a mission to the northern lands to pick up some special merchandise, namely well-trained prepubescent boys and girls. Though the story used the background of the TSR novels the writer brought his own spin to it--the slave trader turns out to be not such a bad guy after all; he's only doing his job and soon develops an affectionate relationship with two of his purchases, both boys. Likewise, the slave auction he attends seems to have been based on historical accounts from the ancient world, for the kids wear Egyptian makeup, skimpy tunics, and perform a near Eastern belly dance, resulting in a fairly interesting hybrid between the "canon" world and the writer's personal interpretation of it. He also avoids the stilted language and blandness that keep the books rated PG.

PJ Jurado, on the other hand, specializes in fantasy novel fanfic and has developed the knack of copying the authors' style so closely I honestly can't tell the non-sexual parts of his writing from the non-sexual parts of the original book. This is both good and bad. Good, because it allows for a smooth bridge between the original and the imitation; and bad, because the usual writing style is overly bland and none of the imitator's own particular personality shines through.

"Cthrag" is based on the Belgariad series of books by David Eddings and picks up at the end of the last book after Garion has married Princess Ce'Nedra and settled down. They are experiencing sexual difficulties and Garion goes to his aunt, the beautiful sorceress Polgara, for advice, but a malign power soon takes over their minds and they wind up fucking each other. The Princess witnesses and runs out in tears.

Jurado copies Edding's writing style very well, but when the characters start having sex they stop being the particular characters fans of the series know and love and turn into the generic fuck-puppets that populate every other mind control story on the net. This is too bad, because if the author had held them in character the spoof could have been wicked and witty instead of just wooden.



Picard in the Garden, Parts One and Two [A]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 1/13/99
Author: Ascem Noone
Address: ascemnoone@yahoo.com

On we head into the sleek high-gloss corridors of Treksmut, where writers have been happily slashing the straightlaced members of Starfleet for over thirty years now. Treksmut writers like to challenge themselves by writing unlikely sexual pairings between the various shows' characters, and in this story Noone has taken up the ultimate gauntlet, namely a sexual encounter between Capt. Picard and Jesus Christ, courtesy of the magic of time travel.

This idea may be a sacrilegious one to some, but the author meant it quite sincerely; whether or not he or she also took it seriously is another story. Like most slash it was written to play on the emotions and personalities rather than gonads, in this part for example:

He leaned close, nuzzling at Jesus' cheek before gently kissing his mouth. One hand came up to cup his face as the other one pulled him close. To his delight, Jesus kissed beautifully, melting against Picard's body as his mouth opened wide. After a few minutes Jean-Luc reached under Jesus' robe and ran a hand up his muscular thigh. He tried to keep his touch soft and comforting, but Jesus moaned deep in his throat and opened his legs wider, giving Jean- Luc access.

Did I take the story seriously? No, but I don't take anything related to Star Trek seriously.



Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished) [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/13/99
Author: Skayda Lee
Address: "Shawn Ricardo King"@ior.com

This story wasn't so much erotica as genre fantasy with sexual undertones. In a world that's a mixture of contemporary earth and Fairyland an elf and a nymph frolic around; the nymph is gang-raped when the elf steps away for a minute (the rape is not shown) and when the elf returns she is dying of the violation, literally fading away before his eyes. He grieves, but in her last moments she sends him a message that they will again be together one day.

There wasn't any sex in this story, only some lightly risque frolicking, so I'm kind of puzzled as to why it was put on the newsgroup at all. However, it was a good workout in the fantasy genre with a few amusing elements such as the vomit-sprites that are born from people's barf...though it was ultimately too lightweight to work as a story in the usual sense.



The Secret Side of the Streets [B+/B]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/19/99
Author: Hyne T'hcalla
Address: hyne-thcalla@rocketmail.com

Here's yet another kind of fanfic, based on a video game this time. This truly puzzles me. How can people get so attached to those blocky, jerky little figures that periodically die in horribly gory ways, and neither speak or evince any sort of personality? (To be fair, I believe there may be a Street Fighter movie and/or TV series out there, but I'm not sure.) Anyway, Chun Li, the female kick- boxer on a secret mission, fantasizes about the two male opponents who defeated her in a recent tournament, Ryu and Ken. But instead of kicking their nabs in she's taking them in tandem, and masturbating herself as the fantasy unfolds.

This was basically an OK story; how much you like it would depend on how much you like the video game/TV show/movie/whatever. The writer writes well, with the caveat that nothing happens in the story that would challenge his or her writing skills very much, and the sex acts were on the generic side and of the kind men like to imagine as being basic nature to beautiful, sexually skilled females, namely a cum-hunger so strong they orgasm from cocksucking alone. There's something insulting in a conceit like that.



Didi on the Cross [A]
Where posted: ASSB
When posted: 1/17/99
Author: Tarquinius Rex
Address: tarquinius@my-dejanews.com

The ancient world was tough on crime, as the author of this story reports: "The events detailed here occurred about 30 CE in the city of Rome." Didi, an ex-slave (female) is convicted in a plot to impersonate a god, and is crucified with weighted fishooks on her nipples, nails through her wrists and ankles, and her legs spread wide so everyone can take a good look at her goods:

Your gaze focuses on your sex, never before seen in public, and you notice how the spreading of your knees opens the pink interior of your pussy, letting the hot intense sunlight sear it like raw meat tossed on a heated grill. Runny white semen slowly oozes from your open pussy down your spread-open crack and onto the probing horn in your asshole. You gaze, in hypnotic transfixed wonder, at your clitoris, publicly displayed for all to see. You try in vain to flex something in rhythm, trying to match body movements in unison with the shocked waves of shameful sensations flooding that prominent and throbbing button of nerves.

Definitely not for the squeamish, though the historical tone lends a certain amount of distance. Visceral and haunting, recommended for BDSM fans.


1/31/99


Here's another review, last for the month.

I don't ordinarily watch much TV, but something drove me to watch Star Trek: Voyager the other night. Maybe it's all the fanfic I've been reading. I'm happy to say it was a hoot. Voyager has finally recreated, in this season, the collective silliness and tongue-in-cheek acting of the original show. Too bad they needed 30 years and two other series to get it right. It also helps that there are two strong female characters who act like sarcastic drag queens, an obviously gay hologramic doctor, and three male studmuffins of uncertain sexuality. It's a treat and a laugh and I love it. Capt. Picard should have had such a light touch.


Primal Duty [A]
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
When posted: 1/22/99
Author: Monocle
Address: monocle_o@hotmail.com

A group of men kidnap a young girl to impregnate her for some mysterious cause. But things aren't all bad. The child, they assure her, will be well cared for: "Through anonymous, untraceable gifts and strokes of apparent fortune, you will always be able to provide food, shelter, and the best in education. When the child is grown, it will be informed by our representatives of the circumstances and reason for its conception." The girl also receives pleasure (though she doesn't want to admit it) as a series of man in different animal masks, of different ethnicities, ritually fuck her:

One after the other, each man with a different mask, replaced his predecessor and filled her with his fountaining cock. Big cats, birds of prey, strange tribal gods, bone-white skulls....Susan came. Trapped and inseminated, she could not stop the white-hot burn of orgasm that engulfed her as she thought she could feel the feather-man's come flood her cervix and ooze its way into her womb, to find and meet with the egg that was surely waiting there. Her cries slowly turned to defeated moans.

"Nooooo..nonono.." She whispered as her orgasm ebbed. Her stomach light with butterflies, somehow she knew it had happened. One of the millions upon millions of sperm forced into her had found its target. Black, White, Asian, Indian, she would not know what it was until it was born.

Most impregnation stories I've seen deal with the brutal and humiliating aspects of it, especially if they're interracial. But this one, well...the author has accomplished the impossible in making it sound erotic and sort of appealing. A very hot and recommended read, especially for women.



Teaching the Twins [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/18/99
Author: Mr. Spraycan
Address: mrspraycan@mailanon.com
Website: http://spraycan.sinewave.com
Mailing List: http://www.onelist.com/subscribe.cgi/Erotica_2000

The narrator delivers himself over to a pair of teenagers through the agency of their aunt, with whom he has signed a contract of slavery. Auntie intends to teach the pair how to handle a man properly:

[Her aunt] replied, "Because he's my slave. A pervert who gets his excitement from being humiliated and punished. You'll find lots of men who do, girls. They're so much more fun, believe me." Now Karen is stroking my ass, and reaching under to squeeze my balls, test how firm my erection remains. "This'll be like torture," she said with a twisted smile, glancing at her sister, who is flushed with excitement too.

Like many Mr. Spraycan stories this one seems to merge into a larger arc detailing the ever-changing adventures of the narrator, from domming to subbing to all stages inbetween, with some, as this story seems to suggest, to be followed by further stories. For now, an atmospheric snippet to spark your imagination.



An Unsent Letter [A]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/28/99
Author: Pleasecain
Address: pilgrim936@aol.com
Website: http://members.aol.com/pleasecain

The last story I read by PleaseCain was the silly spoof "Dominatrix Found in Amber" about a fossilized domina who is released to work her magic on Michael Jackson, so this story came as a surprise. A well-to-do man writes a letter detailing his first erotic encounter with another man, and unusually for him, he's inspired to take on the passive role, dressing in a jeweled belt like a Babylonian dancing boy:

From my fingers hung the fine silver chain and dangling faux gems of a waistlet, which attaches around and hangs from the waist, with three minichains dropping loosely from the front, each ending in a green glass stone, swinging above the genitalia. I'd discovered it last week at a street fair, and was struck by its exoticism; I didn't think until bed that evening that it fit for me, for last night, and I returned to purchase it the next day.

This story was a change of pace for this writer, heading into the hot-yet-literate domain charted by gay writers like David Trell and Marc Tremaine. A little too overwritten, perhaps; it's not a quick read to get off on. But if you like your erotica intelligent, you'll like this.



Thrasher Girls part 1 [B-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/13/99
Author: Ronnie B
Address: ronni_b@yahoo.com

The author says of this story, "Here's my first story ever comments please!!" OK, Miss B., you got 'em.

Ronni, Nikki P. and Tam-tams are three teenage girls into tattoos, body piercing, and having sex with black dudes from the projects in exchange for baggies of grass, and they gladly fuck each other as well. From the descriptions of these 14 and 15-year-olds, it's pretty clear the author is living in la-la-land:

I've got five killer tatts -- a barb-wire pattern on my tummy with roses, a sun and moon on each of my boobs, and two Zen characters on each of my butt cheeks -- and my tongue is double pierced. I also have multiple pierces in my left eyebrow, my nose, my belly-button (of course) and one in my labes right where it can rub my clit when I fuck....She looks like a porno- star, and that's why we call her nikki p. The P is for porno. She's really pierced, too, all over, especially her tongue and puss, and she has tatts everywhere on her body. I love the big snake on her tummy that coils down to her crotch, which she shaves all the time. The tail curls up right around her labes and the tip goes up around her puss to her ass. On her ass she has a chick-demon with her tongue wedged in her butt crack. She has demons on both her big boobs, too, but these are both dude-demons. One looks like a devil with a spiked dick. The other is this kind of grim reaper dude with a hard cock made of bone. Then she has creeping ivies and roses all over bod and down to her ankles. She is pretty much the hottest chick around. The other chick in our set is Tamara, who we call tam-tams. She's a year younger than me and nikki, and is only a freshman while we're sophomores. tam-tams is like real thin and tall, like a model or something. She's maybe not even 100 pounds, and she's maybe 5'10" or 5'11", and over six feet when she wears heels, which she does all the time.

OK, #1 a girl 5'11 and 100 pounds would be unable to breathe without a ventilator, and #2 minors can't get tattooed and pierced with parental permission, and #3 extensive piercing and tattoo jobs cost mucho dinero, very big bucks, which is why many of the extensively tattooed and pierced people you see on the streets live in shithole apartments, drive beamer cars, and have no medical insurance. Furthermore, if these teenyboppers happened to somehow get their bodily modifications done for free and on the sly they'd look like shit, because skilled professionals don't give away their services for nothing. Not even for a blow job from a teenage seductress. I am quite fond of tats and piercing, actually, but this major departure from reality, and the phony, contrived nature of the teenage sluts and their shenanigans, made this story one of the ones where I actually said "Yuck!" out loud. I do admit the piece has a raw sort of appeal, though, if you're into reading about teenage trash sucking off black men in a pimpmobile.



Bringing Home the Boss [A-]
Where posted: ASSM
When posted: 1/22/99
Author: Lambchop
Address: pcd10@my-dejanews.com

This story also featured a departure from reality, but it wasn't as annoying as the previous one. A 33-year-old woman with "nice breasts, still pointing straight up like when she was a teenager...[she looked at] her trim stomach and behind. She definitely didn't look 33, yet that's what her driver's license said. 'What is it about me that doesn't interest John anymore?' she wondered.' " The answer is, John's been overtaken with boredom and cable TV. The frustrated Leslie accepts an after-work drink invitation from her sexy boss Sharon, and Leslie finds herself getting turned on by her. The two then repair home to Leslie's house to have a 3-way with her recalcitrant husband.

This story was fairly well written in a technical sense, but a little dull in its chronicling of the character's daily lives; sometimes it's better to just cut to chase, or the orgasms rather, instead of dealing with all the setup for it, which comes across as contrived anyway. Why the sudden interest in football on the husband's part? Why doesn't Leslie serve him divorce papers? And if he's such a couch potato, how come his bod looks so hot? Sometimes in a sex story it's better to say less rather than more.


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