10/1/97 -- The Perils of Supergirl (Richard Marnet); Xena: Warrior Princess (Steve1044); The Amazing Adventures of Penis Boy (RLSparTan); New Plateaus, Parts 1 - 5 (Jumper30); Butter, Parts 1, 2, 3 (Victoria); The Jaguar Princess (TexTrance)
10/13/97 "Lesbian Fiction" -- A Slave to Capitalism (sfmaster); At the Beach (Ellen Hayes); Falling into Grace (Caintigern O'Nial); The Whirlpool (blue_fantasy); Dyke Crossing (Mark Aster)
10/15/97 -- Linda's Epic Adventures in Life, Part 1 (Master Paul); 1997 Teen Blow Job Tournament (Daphne Xu); The Virgin Mary Maguire (Deidre Ng); Wrestler's Rhapsody (Cathy Payne); Mint Green Dodge Dart, Part I (Mouth Breather); Letter to Sarah (The Bear); Objections (Tigger)
10/27/97 -- Java (Mandible); Bondage at the Office (Chris Barrish); Bren, Merman (Dick Gladden); Eruption (Lord Malinov); So HOTT to See You! (Michael Smith)
10/31/97 -- Ring of Fire (Marsupillomii); The Live Novelists Club (Astrakhan); Dominatrix Found in Amber! (PleaseCain); Bird Watching (Eoghann Irving); The Awakening (Robert B. Morton II); Batgirl vs. The Crime School for Girls, Part 5 (S. Sneakly); Batman Forever, 1 - 5 (Roger T. Pipe)
Random notes:
I have begun posting the many websites of writers, site managers, and archivers on my home page (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh). If any of these site listings are outdated or not titled correctly, or if the link doesn't seem to be working, please tell me about it. I am still collecting them, by the way.
The FAQ for the soc.subculture.bondage-bdsm newsgroup, which I talked about in last week's Reviews, is at http://www.unrealities.com/adult/ssbb/faq.htm.
The Perils of Supergirl V1.0 [B+]
When posted: 9/27/97
Where posted: ASSM
Author: Richard Marnet
Address: fast_fist@hotmail.com
This bondage story was so extreme, it was terrifying...a bizarre journey into bodily transformations worthy of a Steven King novel or H.R. Giger fossilized cyborg painting. Go ahead, read it. I dare you.
Although the title gives the impression it's about the fairly innocent adventures of Supergirl, the contents concern themselves more with the wicked doings of her arch-enemy, the Sorceress Zorelle. The two have been at war, and the story begins when Zorelle captures her rival with a kryptonite bondage suit.
This story has similarities to both "Lori's London Vacation" (8/30/97 Reviews) and Watchman's "The Perils of Batgirl" (6/11/97 Reviews) in that the Sorceress's victims are subjected to devices, magical spells, and torture methods that encapsulate, shrink wrap, or embed them in various substances. They are also turned into voodoo dolls, wineskins, mannequins, and plaster statues posed in humiliating ways. To give you a taste of it, one poor girl is totally denuded, then lacquered in a spread- eagled position to be a clothing store mannequin with the stand shoved into her pussy, and a male prisoner fares no better: he's magically transformed into a black leather Barbie doll and plastered onto the evil Sorceress's high-heeled boot. I found it very disturbing, and keep in mind I don't disturb easily when it comes to sex stories.
Worst of all, the longer the victims remain in this state the more mindless they grow. For hard-core bondage enthusiasts (I am not one, but I understand the mindset) there is nothing more wet and compelling than taking a person and turning them into a shiny dildo-like item (or turning *themselves* into such an item) ...an inanimate, but highly sexualized, object that is callously abused in various ways with no hope of rescue. I can't articulate it any better than that. If I were a feminist social commentator, I might say it all goes hand-in-hand with this society's tendency to objectify and control the female sex, as the story had a TG aspect in that the villainess turns male prisoners into centerfold women first before transforming them.
Apart from the astounding extremes of imagination here, the story didn't quite work. It was more a listing of twisted comic-book scenarios than a plot that unfolds in a series of revelations; it didn't flow and carry you along like fiction should. For the horror/sex/bondage joyride it was meant to be, though, it packed a 20-megaton nuclear punch.
The author promises more of this tale is coming and asks us for feedback. Here's mine. C'mon, you can't mean to leave the lacquered chick-on-a- stick in the dusty warehouse for eternity, can you? No one can remain a black leather pussy purse or human wine barrel forever...the universal laws of magic (energy creation and exchange) argue against it. I'm fully expecting them all to get free somehow and enact a Grand Guignol revenge on the villainess...a real slam-bang destruct-fest worthy of the most lurid Marvel comic. I mean it.
NOTE: The unusual nature of the first story reviewed above has started me thinking about other unusual stories I've read, but didn't save or review (and DejaNews searches have come up with nothing):
"Stacy and Me" (or something like that) written by Bigirl (not exactly sure of the name, but I know it wasn't posted under that name.) The story was about two teenage lesbians into body piercing and tattooing. Notable for featuring a pierced anus. This story appeared back in February or March.
Another story (don't know the title) written by a guy about his girlfriend's secret fetish: she works as a waitress in a restaurant, and likes to fart on customer's desserts before serving them.
A cannibalism luau story where a blonde bimbo in a bikini is wrapped in banana leaves and baked in a pit.
A bi man who takes his bi female date to a gay bar, feeds her poppers, then straps her into one of those bondage box thingies where she's fucked all night by horny gays who think she's a guy. I have the first half of this, but missed the whole thing.
If any one can help me find them, I'd appreciate it.
Xena: Warrior Princess [A-]
When posted: 9/28/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Steve1044
Address: steve1044@aol.com
Website: http://members.aol.com/steve1044/story.html
"Xena: Warrior Princess" is a TV series set in a Greco-Roman never- never land about the adventures of buxom, black-haired Amazon Xena and her bard (?) companion, Gabrielle. Lucy Lawless plays Xena, and she has inspired a host of ASS stories based on her figure and the skimpy black leather corset she wears. This is one of them.
The plot was pretty simple: while traveling on the road Xena and Gabrielle meet Xena's fave squeeze, massive muscleman Hercules. Together they go to visit Xena's family. Xena has a beautiful sister named Ariel who Gabrielle is attracted to, while Xena and Herc decide to act on their passion for each other. Both couples have hot sex. Although I don't watch the show too often, I could easily imagine the characters acting and emoting the way they do in the story, even though the setting was only minimally described. In a lot of ways the piece was reminiscent of Ann Douglas's style: a congenial read that leaves you with a good feeling at the end.
There was a sly sense of humor at work here as well: "Hercules pulled his dick out of Xena, with much disapproval. Xena stared at him in disgust, as though he had just taken her favorite toy. He had."
This author states is interested in writing a story with a female friend. How about it, girls?
The Amazing Adventures of Penis Boy [A+]
When posted: 9/27/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: RLSparTan
Address: rlspartan@aol.com
This story reminded me of the old joke: Did you know Peter O'Toole has a double-phallic name?
A man is christened with the birth name of Penis. All his life he carries the stigma, until he sees a lawyer who advises him it is not a liability, but an advantage, particularly in the sexual arena. Penis takes his advice and plays on the name to become the world's most prolific lover, but as his organ doesn't measure up to his name, the women don't stick around. Until one day when he is kidnapped by aliens...
This was short romp and it was pretty hilarious, with some clever puns. The story jumped right along like a caffeine addict and always surprised me...the perfect miscegenation between an extended-joke story and the rarer, but funnier, earthling abduction story where the aliens try to puzzle out the mysteries of human reproduction. The last line was a cincher, but I like this one better (and you will have to read the story to see exactly how funny it is): "His life had yielded shallow, unfulfilling relationships leaving a trail of disappointment, culminating in a screwing of cosmic proportions. "
New Plateaus, Parts 1 - 5 [B]
When posted: 9/24/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Jumper30
Address: jumper30@aol.com
I like the recent changes in the Celestial Reviews. It's fun to infer the sexual and moral quirks of the guest reviewers from the casual commentary they write. Lady Cyrrh is a bit of a voyeur. For this story, I've been inspired to think like a Celeste guest reviewer myself.
Charles is a guy who loves spanking soft female bottoms. Not in saucy little slaps, but great big whalloping inch-high welt-raisers. He gets pissed off when his new girlfriend is late for dinner and starts issuing orders for her to strip and bend over. Well, soggy quiche is pretty irritating. The choice is a spanking or a breakup. She opts for breaking up, but later returns for her punishment out of sheer can't-live- without-you desire for him. So the author says. Lady Cyrrh says, the guy's a complete and utter jerk.
Though the spanking/caning and B/D scenes were very well done, which is typical for spanko fiction, the vapid nature of the main characters was a big turn-off and so were the warped, selfish power games they played. Good B/D is about dominance and submission...an intricate dance of desire and repulsion, pain and pleasure. These guys seemed more exploitive of each other than interested in giving mutual enjoyment. This was the same problem that plagued the otherwise well- written Ferrous Juggler tales that appeared a while back.
To be fair, the writing was good, and the little "scenes" were shaped well. I liked Part 4 the best, as it dealt with an innocent girl who signs herself over for a year of slavery to an exclusive club, and I thought perhaps we would be getting into a juicy new-slave-on-the-scene type of plot. But then we go back to the adventures of the jerk as he submits to spanking, strapping, and dildo play from a black female co-worker (whose job it was to prepare the slave) while talking to his girlfriend on the phone and ordering her to rub her pussy as she's sitting naked in a library cubicle while the black Amazon sucks his cock at the same time...keeping his blowjob a secret from the girlfriend, of course, 'cos everyone knows how jealous girls can get. At that point, I got disgusted with the whole thing.
Under usual circumstances I would have given this story an A for the sex; but as I said, I'm a guest reviewer today, and the shortcomings of the piece made me grumpy.
Butter, Parts 1, 2, 3 [A]
When posted: 9/22/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Victoria
Address: vicky_vixen@hotmail.com
This was the hottest anal sex story I've read so far, and a relief after reading the one above because the characters acted like real people. It was written as an actual life experience in an insightful and concise, yet feminine, tone that was easy to curl up on the sofa with.
The narrator wants to try out buttery anal sex with her boyfriend after being inspired by the movie "Last Tango in Paris." (Note: Kim's story "Computer Games on a Sunday" names the lubricant involved as margarine.) She goes to the local sex toy shop and buys a vibrator and some anal beads. When the big night begins, he takes charge of the show with honey and a cold stick of butter, both of which go in her ass, followed by his fingers, teeth and tongue. Oh boy, was this hot. I guess it confirms my Lion's Share Rule: you can always guess the sex of a writer by who gets the most head.
After some orgasms, he pleasures her with the anal beads. But...whoops! They're the wrong size, vaginal beads rather than anal ones. No matter. She still has a great experience. People who might be repulsed at sex acts like this should consider there's a reason why people like them -- they feel good. If women still have problems with it, think of it as vaginal fucking from the inside out.
Victoria says she has more stories she is planning on sharing with us. Please do!
The Jaguar Princess [A]
When posted: 9/7/97
Where posted: SSBB (soc.subculture.bondage-bdsm)
Author: TexTrance
Address: textrance@aol.com
If I had to categorize this, I'd call it a South American magic realism/corporate mind control story. The magic realism of the story comes in through the hypnosis-induced journeys through temple-filled jungles the characters make, and these parts were very lyrical and touched on Central American myth. There wasn't much sex, though there was a lot of innuendo. This didn't bother me, but if you're expecting tons of hot action, you might be disappointed.
A recent college grad starts a job at a large company where he'll be working in under Elena, a beautiful Hispanic woman. She has a certain way with mind control, and hypnotizes him. She knows he has a secret yen for female domination, and offers him total slavehood of a sort he's never even dreamed about before...he will be her faithful employee and her new house servant. Elena has a similar arrangement with Lupe, her cousin and housekeeper. The two women have a sexual relationship as well, but Lupe wants to start a family...and Elena as the matriarch and the "Jaguar Princess" of the title intends her to marry the narrator.
Mind control stories speak to the human desire to be sexual without the cares and consequences of real life intruding, in the same way rape fantasies may allow some people who've suffered through a sexually repressed upbringing to experience sexual pleasure under the guise of being "forced" to do so. As a mc story, this one spoke to those needs. The events that happen were depicted positively; that is positively as a fantasy in that the narrator finds fulfillment and pleasure in his subjugation and really does find the answer to his dreams.
Random notes:
I have begun posting the many websites of writers, site managers, and archivers on my home page (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh). If any of these site listings are outdated or not titled correctly, or if the link doesn't seem to be working, please tell me about it. I am still collecting them, by the way. Rajah Dodger recently sent me at least twenty. Thank you Rajah!
The FAQ for the soc.subculture.bondage-bdsm newsgroup, which I talked about in last week's Reviews, is at http://www.unrealities.com/adult/ssbb/faq.htm.
This week's issue is devoted to dyke fiction. Or lesbian fiction. Whatever you prefer.
Lesbian fiction is a very popular element in mainstream porn. Duh. Like we don't know that. Dykes like it. Straight men like it, for various reasons (1. They just like to watch women having sex; 2. They have fantasies of joining in and showing the dykes a thing or two; 3. It gives them the opportunity to imagine themselves as either woman fucking the other one; 4. It allows them to connect with the primal elemental SHE buried deep within the male psyche. According to Camille Paglia. Tongue in cheek here.) Some straight women like it, one of the reasons being women are more understanding of and appreciative of each other's sexuality than those nasty men could ever be. In Western culture women are so sexualized anyway, especially in the media (turn on the TV at any time of night or day and you're barraged with red, shiny lips, cleavage, and long slim legs stalking around in high-heeled shoes) and one of the results, I feel, is that modern women can't help but be indoctrinated to see other women as sex objects the same way men see them. It's enlightening to remember that in other times and cultures, such as ancient Greece and Medieval Italy, young men were the chosen sex objects, not the young women, by the adult males who had the power in those societies. But I digress.
Evaluating these stories, therefore, is harder than evaluating gay male ones, simply because it's harder to tell where the author is coming from. In gay male fiction, certain elements of that culture clue you in that you're dealing with a different sexuality, but because lesbian subculture is so well integrated into the mainstream American one, it's hard to tell if the author is speaking from an authentic lesbian viewpoint or not. Not that this makes a difference as to whether a story is entertaining; only a reader can judge that value. But sex stories, like all stories, benefit from actual research, experience and detail; and such details definitely up the ratings I give them.
Anyway, here are the stories.
A Slave to Capitalism [A]
When posted: 9/28/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: sfmaster
Address: sfmaster@worldnet.att.net
This was a very enjoyable BDSM/blackmail story. It was written by a guy from the byline, but it was still enjoyable.
Doris, a young woman who works in a leather clothing store, has been stealing some of the merchandise so she can outfit herself as well as Andrea, the store's owner. She's found out. And as typical for such stories, Andrea offers her a deal: she'll forget about the jail sentence if Doris agrees to be her slave for a year or so. Doris soon finds out what kind of situation she got herself into when Andrew turns out to be a leather-loving lesbian dominatrix who she has to call "Mistress."
The story was a very competent execution of its type. The sex was hot, the characters believable (well, believable for a sex story, anyway) and the pacing zipped right along. The story ends with the slave chained to the kitchen wall as Mistress does the dishes. I'm ready for part two!
At the Beach [A-]
When posted: 9/24/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Ellen Hayes
Address: Unknown
Posted by: Sweet Paradise
Address: http://ods.ods.net/voidnet/index.htm
This story was reposted by an archiver, Sweet Paradise.
Teenage Andrea (another Andrea? What is with these androgynous names?) is vacationing with her parents at the beach. She makes a close friend there, Darlene, who surprises her one night on the dunes with a passionate kiss...and other things. Andrea freaks out, ashamed of being a lesbian, and runs out into the storm. Later, the two make up, and love saves the day.
There wasn't any sex in this besides the kiss, but as a teen "coming-out" story it was very effective, and sensitive without being exploitive. In fact, it was so feel-good it didn't seem to belong with the archiver's overexcited hyperbole: "Over 100 new stories have been added this month! Everything from gangbangs to teenage lesbians!" I assume Ellen Hayes is actively writing because the copywrite on this story was 1997, but I haven't seen any of her stories on ASS or ASSG before. She should post here more often.
Falling into Grace [A+]
When posted: 10/12/97 (by me)
Where posted: ASSM
Author: Caintigern O'Nial
Address: Caintigern@deathsdoor
Caintigern has followed up last summer's multi-part gay Medieval fantasy "Knight Errant" with this tale of a lesbian romance. It was posted months ago, so I'm taking the liberty of reposting it myself.
Grace Terranova is attending an international music festival with her hunky boyfriend when she sees an attractive blonde woman, Phil (nee Phylicia) who flashes her a smile. Grace feels compelled to leave the arms of her boyfriend and follow. The two women spend a perfect day together, meet the next day for lunch, and go back to Phil's (another androgynous name) house, where they have gobs of lovingly detailed, steamy sex.
The author described this tale as "This is a story that I began to write several years ago. You may find that my style of prose is somewhat more immature than you may be used to. I know that I can see it, but I'm fond of the story anyway for various reasons. When I get to the later sections, I'll have to write them from scratch and the stylistic difference may be much more noticeable." This is a little harsh; it's just as delightful in its way as the "Knight" series. This author is very skilled at portraying people in the intial stages of romantic and sexual attraction. Their lips tremble; they yearn; they're swept away in the throes of love/lust. It's a tribute to the writer's skill that this larger-than-life romanticism convinces without becoming cloying and gooey. She's (I'm 90% sure of this writer's sex, but I've been fooled before) got an observant eye for detail and character; the story sparkled with little touches that made you believe this was a real event happening to real people...like the lesbian liking for Enya's music and the ubiquitous rum and cokes, which made it the most "authentic" for me of all the stories reviewed here.
Because the story was so good, it feels like a sacrilege to point out its weak spots, but I'm a critic, and that's what critics do. Foremost was that boyfriend. He sounds pretty hot. Why would any woman dump a Ken-doll lookalike who naughtily diddles them under a blanket in public area? Now, the author did an excellent job of convincing me why Grace did...she's really an in-the-closet lesbian...but for the purposes of the story, it might have been better to make the male more of a cold fish. Also, some of the dialogue sounded a little silly, particularly the post- coital discussion at the end, but on the whole the story deserves its A+.
Caintigern, please finish the stories you've begun!
The Whirlpool [B+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: blue_fantasy
Address: blue_fantasy@hotmail.com
The narrator of this story is driving through Europe when she stops at a Swiss hotel. She's attracted to the young woman at the desk, and her excitable nipples betray her arousal. Later that night, soothing her muscles in the whirlpool bath, she starts to fantasize. The pretty young clerk barges in on her, notices her passion, and begins to masturbate too...and it's the beginning of an affair.
This story was one of those casual, loosely written I-narratives that could be either fiction or a conversational retelling of an actual experience. I suspect it's a load of fake cowhide, because the narrater speaks too colloquial to be a European (she uses "cause" instead of "because") and it's not the sort of language used by an expatriate businesswoman type either. Though it was enjoyable for what it was and the sex was good, the additional, realistic details would have pushed the grade up for me.
Dyke Crossing [A]
When posted: 9/19/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Mark Aster
Address: MyFrThAl@aol.com
This story was part of the "My Friends the Allens" series.
Pat, the slightly pregnant wife(?) of the narrator, meets Mike, an college friend, downtown. Mike is a dyke and has a thing for tattoos. The couple bring her home for a visit. Sex follows, first between Pat and Mike, the two women (I noticed they both had androgynous names) which occurs simultaneously as the male narrator has sex with Julia, Pat's sister, who gives a blow-by-blow description of the sex between Pat and Mike (again, they're the two women.)
The writing here was skillful in its evocation of the personalities involved and especially the descriptions of the characters. The dyke, for example, has the picture of a spread-legged nude woman tattooed over her belly, her naval being the tattoo-woman's twat. (Sounds like the sort of thing a kinky dom would do to her sub, along with various piercings.) Though I liked the cleverness of the story and the characters came to life for me, there was a big hole at the middle of it...namely, why these well-rounded, three-dimensional characters act the way they do. Do the couple have some sort of special pre-nuptial agreement that allows fooling around? Are they turned on by watching each other have sex? Are their brains so fried by drugs or drink they'll fuck anything, anywhere? Everyone's so...well, cheerful about it. I know this story is one of a series, so perhaps the reasons are given earlier, or later; certainly we don't have to have a situation where we're told the reasons every time a fuck occurs, like in the "Phantom" syndicated comic strip where "another name for the ghost who walks" appears at the bottom of the panel by an asterisk every time the Phantom is addressed as Mr. Walker. But make no mistake, this one omission in the story bugged me.
News from the continuing war on spam:
Eli (moderator of alt.sex.stories.moderated) has written a Statement of Policy for alt.sex.stories.moderated that everyone should read, echoing some of Ole Joe's comments and mine, too. I will try to get his permission to post it on my website.
Sadly, even some of the moderated newsgroups are being inundated with spam. Soc.subculture.bondage-bdsm has been recently flooded with tripe like CUNTS, CLITS AND SLITS and SEX SEX SEX SEX. Are spammers getting more sneaky, or is someone asleep on the job?
On a happier note, a new newsgroup has joined us: alt.sex.stories.gay.moderated. The moderater is Mykkhal (moderated.stories@bigfoot.com). In one of his first posts to this newsgroup, Mykkhal had this to say about the Nifty Stories archive, which archives gay, lesbian and TG stories. I thought it worthwhile to repeat here as I know many ASS and ASSM writers use it.
" 2. The Nifty Archives - (not technically ASSGM business, but important nonetheless)
Guys, it is time to take a little action here. I received a lot of offers regarding some limited financial support before I set up this group, and other than a software purchase, there hasn't been any real cost for it. Instead, I'd like those of you who offered, and preferably everyone possible to make a small (or large) donation to the Nifty Archives. The Nifty Archivist provides his archival site as a service to the gay and lesbian community. However, he relies upon reader support to be able to maintain it. I was just told that he is averaging over 20,000 hits a day. For those who don't know, the more hits you have on your server, the more you have to pay to have your site. "OUR" readership of his site is increasing his costs, creating higher server demands, additional hardware demands, etc. It is time we gave a little something back. He makes a very modest request for donations at his site, but I'm going to make a less modest one:
If we don't support him, we are going to lose this service. How long it will take, I don't know, but unless he receives some financial support it isn't going to last forever.
A small core of authors (mind you I said authors, not readers) have been making some contributions, but this is not enough to keep the site going with the increasing storage space required. If you enjoy reading the stories in those archives, it is time to cough up a couple bucks. Just think that if the Nifty Archivist received only $1 for each of the hits he received in just one day, he'd have enough money to keep his site going for quite some time. I encourage all of you to visit his site and follow the links for donating to the archives. I think a small donation is the least we can do, considering the large amount of time, effort, and personal financial support the Nifty Archivist has put in to provide a service for "US".
By the way, these opinions expressed are strictly my own, and the information I relayed was forwarded to me by an author, not the Nifty Archivist.
Okay, I'll get down off that soap box now =) "
Sorry, but I don't know the Nifty Archivist's address. Readers?
Erotic BDSM Story: Linda's Epic Adventures in Life, Part 1 [B-/C+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Master Paul
Posted by: Monica Chu
Address: ntendo@hotmail.com
In this story, a hardbitten stripper reflects on her first BDSM experience: it begins when she makes the mistake of bashing a drunk male customer with a beer bottle when he jams his fingers in her pussy and asshole. A perfectly understandable reaction, but Hilda, the strip club owner's girlfriend, doesn't see it that way. She pulls the stripper downstairs to the "special room" the staff uses to discipline its "whores" (no self-respecting exotic dancer would stand for such insults these days--many of them are unionized, no kidding) and straps her into a chair-like frame that rotates. Hilda then inserts dildoes in the stripper's ass and pussy and flogs her there.
The B/D gear was nicely described, but outside of that, the story didn't have a lot of appeal. Part of it was due to the language: " 'You goddamn dumb whore!' screamed Hilda, 'How many fucking times do I have to tell you I handle the assholes and you don't ever, ever hit em with anything unless they ask you to, UPSTAIRS! " I wanted to wash the characters' mouths out with a bar of soap. This sort of language occured in every other paragraph and brought to mind bikers, drug dealers, and other lowlifes. While some people may find them sexy, this strata of society doesn't do anything for me by notoriety of their substance abuse, unkempt appearance, and body odor.
There were many smaller sins, from grammatical errors to misspellings: for example, the writer had the annoying habit of enclosing each sentence of dialogue in quotation marks even though the sentences were all in the same paragraph. The story also lost effectiveness because it was narrated in flashback rather than present tense, which made it lose what little momentum it had.
Finally, it's far more fun in a BDSM story to have the slave victim be a newbie, wannabe, or experienced player who juggles their sub tendencies with the responsibilities of real life. Strippers, in the public imagination anway, are supposed to be total sluts who eagerly enjoy any sort of sex act...which meant the kinky bite of the acts in this story were diluted by having them happen to one.
New Spam Story: 1997 Teen Blow Job Tournament [A+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Daphne Xu
Address: daphne@nym.alias.net
Malinov is running a spam short story contest in which entrants write a short (1,000 word or less) story with a title taken from the title of a SPAM post. (There is no deadline.) This story was one of the entries. I'm very glad I read it.
The story was reminiscent of those Twilight Zone pieces like Dierdre's or Seurat's in that an everyday situation suddenly becomes sexualized. In this case, it's an intercollegiate athletic competition. But the teams of young women aren't competing in field hockey or volleyball. Nude and blindfolded, they're giving blowjobs to a team of lucky males. The narrator of this adventure is a Chinese exchange student unfamiliar with American customs, which gives the story a nice touch: a double dose of strangeness worthy of the best literary fantasy out there.
The blowjob competition is thoroughly detailed, and the narrator's reactions were believable for a Chinese student in the US. The only part I went "huh?" at is the fact the participants were required to cough up a $500 entrance fee, which seemed rather steep; some of them were also written as being reluctant, which belies the fact that they're supposed to be there voluntarily. But this was an excellent story anyway, probably the best multiple-partner-teen-sex-in-school story I've seen (there've been quite a few of them.) The story ends on a nice note too, with the revelation a "Teen Cunnilingus" contest is soon to be held. We can only hope.
The Virgin Mary Maguire [A-]
When posted: 10/11/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Deirdre Ng
Address: DeidreNg@aol.com
This was a bizarre little story concerning the manipulations of a junior- high slut among the Catholic clergy and in a corporate law office. Like the story above, it takes place in a strange world that's slightly off-kilter from the one modern teenagers inhabit.
Mary McGuire lives in a time-warp world before Vatican II where corporeal punishment still reigns in Catholic school. She's determined to stay a virgin, but she's hardly chaste--she gets into trouble when she displays her genitals as she's giving a report on female sexuality. Sent to Father McMartin's office, she shows him the same marks of Eve, makes him wear her sopping panties over his face, then ties him to a chair with his shoelaces while giving him a hand job. Merrily leaving him to be discovered by the parochial school's board of directors, she accompanies her dad to career day at his office. On the way she exposes herself in the back of his sedan to truck drivers, then gives his boss a handjob and wrangles a promotion for dad and a summer internship for herself.
The story was cleverly written and a real page-turner, with some truly depraved touches like the creative use of rosary beads. (Hint: it's the same thing they were used for in the butter story I reviewed two weeks ago.) However, as a reader I just didn't buy it. There's several reasons for this. Number one is I went to parochial school in my formative years, and from firsthand experience I can tell you that priests and nuns are incorrigibly dull, narrow-minded souls rather than sexually intriguing ones. Yes, Lady Cyrrh was a Catholic. *Was.*
Second, the teen in the story talked and connived way too maturely for a young girl--she was more Suzie Sleaze than Lolita. She also had a mysterious mind control power that was never explained. I half-expected she'd reveal herself as the actual Virgin Mary or something, but no luck. I also wondered why she was exposing herself before decrepit old men instead of sexy peachy-cheeked lads her own age.
In sum, the entertainment value of this story depends on how much you enjoy fetishistic Catholic school rituals and smartass teen exhibitionists. I'm not a fan of either, but I did like the quality of writing in this piece, and that's why I gave it the rating I did.
Gee, I just noticed the first, second and third stories of this review were all posted by Asian females.
Wrestler's Rhapsody [A+]
When Received: 10/3/97
Author: Cathy Payne
Address: cpayne@sympatico.ca
The author sent me this, and I believe it's the first story I've seen from a Canadian woman. Note to the author: You may want to post this now that it's been reviewed.
This story crossed several genres: spanking, first time, and wrestler. Uh- huh. Wrestler. Anyway, the narrator is a homeless teen who is adopted by a professional wrestler named Killer and his family. He's big. Very big, and he takes his role as guardian quite seriously: he tells her no lying, swearing, or brushes with the law. She shapes up under his wing, but finds, as she nears her seventeenth birthday, that she is attracted to him as well and plans for him to be "the one" who takes her virginity. Her plotting includes catching him in a lie and punishing him for it by parading around in seven different lingerie outfits, each of which he has to unlace (no touching!) before ravishing her at the end of the last modeling session. But things don't go quite as planned, and the smug, plotting spanker soon becomes the spankee over Killer's burly knee.
This story was very enjoyable and very female-oriented; like Joe Parson's "When Morning Comes" it might serve as a good introduction to erotica for someone who's always been hesitant about reading it before. The story had just the right balance of sex, sexual tension, and background; nothing was left inadequately described. There was a also a tiny bit of a romance-novel feel to it--not strong, but it was there-- particularly in the banter between the girl and her deflowerer. The only suggestion I would make is to give a paragraph or two of background on the girl (where are her parents?) but all in all, women who dig wrestler's bodies will like this tale, and even those who don't will.
Mint Green Dodge Dart, Part I [A-]
When posted: 10/11/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Mouth Breather
Address: mouthbrthr@aol.com
The author says of this story, "The sexual fantasy soon to pour out of my head borders on the sophistication of the pre-pubescent."
I wouldn't call it pubescent so much as the kind of light, fun romp that authors like DG, Mike Hunt, and Tom Bombadil have done so well. Two beautiful, statuesque lesbians hire a stupendously hung guy ("With my full payment, I knew, I could get that reduction surgery I had always wanted.") to participate in a sexual encounter with them. He arrives at their isolated estate in a mint-green Dodge Dart...which I can picture exactly...and soon finds out the 10 grand he's getting includes some kink when one of the ladies carries a strange leather harness into the bedroom with her. No sex occurs, but we're primed.
I enjoyed the descriptions in here, which were slightly reminiscent of tough-guy detective fiction. There were a few strange misspellings, such as "She lost her composer for a second" but outside of that, things were very clean for a first draft. I am looking forward to part two.
Letter to Sarah [A]
When posted: 10/4/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Bear
Address: thebear@io.com
This is one of the first stories I've seen from The Bear. He's also written two entries for Lord Malinov's contest.
This story has one of those classic erotica setups that you just HAVE to read through. College coed Sarah receives a package in the mail containing some sexy Victoria Secret's underthings and a list of instructions. She's to go to a certain motel room on a certain date and time, let the occupant of the room blindfold her, then dance like a wanton slut and present herself on the bed for some serious fucking. Naturally, the letter gets her very excited. But the problem is, she doesn't know which of her two boyfriends wrote it, Brian or Tom...because they're roommates and share each others' computer and belongings. Dangerous game you're playing there, Sarah! The story ends as she knocks on the motel room door, and Bear says more is to come. I'm guessing she gets a double surprise.
The only thing I didn't like about the story was the come-on-my-tits- and-face-scene. Even though it was prettily described as a "liquid pearl necklace" I can't see a young woman being too happy with goo squirted into her hair, especially as the lover has neglected her climax in favor of his own. Nonetheless, this was a very nice story, and I'd like to see it continued.
Objections [A]
When posted: 9/13/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Tigger
Address: tigger@alices.com
A new story by Tigger, always a pleasure. It's one of the most effective treatments of femdom I've seen.
The story is science fiction and takes place in a world where Bill and Al and the rest of their cabinet perish in a plane crash. Newt Gingrich becomes President and foments a Vietnam-like war in Philippines, necessitating a new draft. Jerry and Mark are two young men who try to worm out, Mark by his "sole male in the family" status, and Jerry as a consciencous objector. As a CO, Jerry is sent to a camp high in the Rockies where he's transformed into a woman...and a prime baby- making machine whose duty it is to pop out male cannon fodder for the conservative state.
Although this concept is quite horrendous (it's like a TG version of Margaret Atwood's "The Handmaid's Tale") the story benefited from Tigger's light, amused style, and was richly and authentically detailed as well. That's the great thing about Tigger; the stories are so *real.* They are also very different from one another; this writer keeps moving on to new challenges. I'd like to point out, too, that though the story made me laugh, it also has a sobering side as a cautionary tale.
This n' that:
Talk about authors not receiving credit for their work. Susan White's bondage story "Master SExxx" (reviewed 9/13/97) turned up as the "My Master" in the Articera story archives (http://www.arcticera.com/stories), with no author credit given. If I was the author, I'd complain. And if any archivers habitually delete author bylines and preface material from stories, shame on you.
The new newsgroup alt.gay.sex.stories.moderated has a posting guidelines/FAQ available at: http://www.geocities.com/WestHollywood/Heights/8885. In the words of an ASSGM subscriber: "Hopefully jacking off is healthy. If not, I'll die soon."
I myself have a FAQ of sorts on my website listed under "About this Site." One of the things I would like to reiterate from it is the three-month rule. Some of you, upon receiving a good write-up, immediately send me another story for review. I dearly appreciate this, as I read more than I review and have limited time to wade through all the spam-flooded newsgroups, but, as I am limited to the amount of stories I can get through each month and want to give a broad selection of what's out there, I have decided to rotate authors on a three month-basis. That is, if I review a story by you in March, your "turn" for review will come again in June. The three-month turnaround may change as I become more familiar with the authors out there. But I do like to receive the stories, because I read them even if I don't review them, to keep on top of an author's recent work and how they're developing.
Finally, I am seriously considering moving my website off AOL and onto a friendlier, faster server. If there is anyone out there who would like to sponsor this worthy site, or knows of an adult friendly server which is fast and has minimal downtime, please let me know. I have also ordered a US Robotics 56.6 modem, so I can finally visit all the web sites I've been asked to without twiddling my thumbs in front of the console for hours. Surf City, here I come!
Java [A+]
When posted: 10/4/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Mandible
Address: mandible@deaths.door
The last story I read by Mandible was one of the first I reviewed ("The Evil Queen" 5/5/97) so I figure he or she is due up for another round.
Like "The Evil Queen," "Java" interwove elements of fantasy fiction and fandom into the main story line. A hep cat in a Dave Matthews Band T- shirt sits down in a cyber espresso bar to fool around on one of the bar's computers. He notices a nearby woman banging away on her keyboard with great enthusiasm (not that kind of banging) and sneaks a peek at what she's doing. She's in an adult chat room, so he follows, and dialogue between the two ensues, which is at once amusing, banal, touching, and ridiculous.
Other writers have tackled the chat-room scenario before, but what made this one special was the realistic nature of it, complete with misspellings and abbreviations. The author also successfully captured the fast pace of the exchanges and their silly fantasy underpinnings, as both characters took on cliched personas (a warrior woman and a barbarian) as they try to convey an idealized image of what they think a potential lover would find appealing...for example, the sculpted amazon wants to immediately suck the barbarian's cock, while the barbarian would rather have a romantic romp in a mountain meadow. (Alternately, the role-reversed desires could be read as the genuine, hidden desires of a typical male or female released from straightlaced sex roles.)
At any rate, the dialogue boils along at a fast pace as each character tries to wrest control of the fantasy from the other, and it ends as the "barbarian" introduces himself in real life to the mortified "amazon" behind him in the cafe, who then runs out of the room in embarrassment. I would have liked the story to end right there (oh the irony of it all) but as it turns out, the bearded, nerdy guy (actually nothing at all like his barbarian later ego) dashes after her to apologize, and they stroll arm and arm into the sunset, or the more likely the apartment of whoever lives the closest, to enact some of the fantasies they wrote.
I gave "The Evil Queen" an A- for the author's successful spoof of a genre fantasy novel as the real-world sequences were only average, but "Java" is a winner all around, and shows a writer coming into greater mastery of their craft.
Bondage at the Office [B+/B]
When posted: 10/19/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Chris Barrish
Address: >A HREF="mailto:diamond@en.com">mailto:diamond@en.com
This was one of those twisted reality tales where an everyday situation or scenario becomes sexualized. In this case, it's your typical 9 to 5 office job. The story wasn't really a story; it was more like a description of the kinky ways female workers can be trained on the job. For example, one gal is outfitted as a coffee table, and another, a receptionist, has a device strapped in her pussy which vibrates in lieu of that annoying telephone ring. The story was told in a patter reminiscent of a female narrator at a fashion show or one of those 1940s newsreels, and I'm not sure if it added to the piece or detracted from it. I personally got a kick out of it, but my editorial side thinks there should be more story to it.
Bren, Merman [A-/B+]
When posted: 10/22/97
Where posted: ASSGM
Author: Dick Gladden
Address: dickgladden@hotmail.com
Where else but on the alt.sex.newsgroups can you find a story about a masturbating gay merman, by an author named Dick Gladden, no less?
This story was very short, and very much of a mood piece about a young merman who flees from the responsibilities of his kingdom and longs to reach an ecstatic union with the currents of the sea. It read something like the Disney erotica about Ariel the mermaid, save the main character was male; there was some lovely poetic language in here and I could easily see this story being the basis for a longer piece. There also seemed to be an in-joke about it, given the popularity of swimmers and swimmer's bodies in contemporary gay sexual fantasies.
Eruption [A-/B+]
When posted: 10/14/97
Author: Lord Malinov
Address: malinov@mindless.com
Mick Jagger. David Bowie. Morissey. Peter Garrett of Midnight Oil. (Just kidding.) These are the sexy men of rock and roll. Surprisingly, for as hormone-laden and honeydripping as the rock and roll world is, there have been comparatively few ASS stories about it--only a few execrable Spice Girls stories, and that's it. (Note posted later: In soc.sexuality.spanking, Mr. Spraycan has posted some stories about spanking in the rock world, featuring cameos by a Stones roadie, Sid Vicious and Nancy Spungeon, and the Beatles.)
In this story, a rock guitarist goes to visit the girlfriend of his songwriting partner. He's stuck at the beginning stages of a new song. The girlfriend describes the partner's wild sexual behavior, which gets him going and inspires him to finish. Seems the partner likes to act like a werewolf. Well, aren't all rock stars crazy?
I liked this story for its background, which as I said, which is something you don't see too often, and the drama of the inter-band incest that seems to be playing out. The writer used some awkward language, like "absorbing the steady drone and splay of Brian's incited guitar" "cupidic lips" and some nice language, like "the rattle of glass bottles and the slight pop of the caps as her footsteps brought her back" and "by tasting, by devouring the fruit of his best friend's woman." Overall, the story brings to mind an author who is beginning to pay serious attention to his craft.
So HOTT to See You! [A]
When received: 10/15/97
Author: Michael Smith
Address: msmith1@mediaone.net
Web page: http://www.se.mediaone.net/~msmith1
This story was sent to me by the author: it is available on the author's web page.
In a lot of ways this story reminded me of a cross between Joe Parson's "When Morning Comes" (9/6/97 Reviews) and a Dulcinea short. A man and a woman slowly, lovingly masturbate in front of each other, becoming more and more turned on, until finally he ejaculates, and she comes. The style was more overladen than Parson's, and a little more formal and distanced; I found it amounted to more of a visual treat than a sensorial one. Like the Parson piece, it was female in tone. By that I mean it was tuned into more of the traditional female responses to sex and sensuality. If there was no byline, I might have assumed it was written by a woman.
Except for one thing, which brings up an interesting discussion of romance vs. porn. In the middle of all this creamy, steamy soft-core furry domains and rising nubs comes the exclamation: "Stroke it, Baby! Jack that cock while I fuck myself."
Now, I know that many loving couples (and not so loving couples) speak like this in the throes of sexual passion; everyone knows the power of dirty talk. But somehow, it deflates the mood here, like a crusty brown stain on a silky Victoria's Secret teddy. I'm a fan of dirty talk, myself (why else would I write the things I do?) but I also think certain illusions have to be maintained for successful fiction. For a romance, more neutral language like "Stroke harder. I want to see you come," might have been more appropriate, as the romance elements of this story overshadowed the porn ones.
This n' that:
Does anyone have Mr. Double's new web address? Apparently he's moved.
Soc.sexuality.spanking is sponsoring a new story contest called "Venus and Mars" in which teams of male and female writers write a story in alternating paragraphs. Should be interesting.
I am still collecting website addresses. In addition, if any of the ones I have on my site don't work, tell me about it.
Ring of Fire [A-/B+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Marsupillomii
Address: ladyzak@hotmail.com
This was not an anal sex story or one about country music, despite the title.
The story is a serious, high fantasy retelling of the Ring of the Niebelung; that is, the opera where fat ladies with long braids are screaming their heads off. Gods are murdered, blood-prices paid, a treasure tempts, and a man becomes a dragon and is slain by his brother, Sigmund the prince. Sigmund then claims as his reward the beautiful valkyrie Brunhilde, who gives him a blow job.
The tone of this was so poetic and elegant it's hard to make fun of it, but, like the opera, it was a yawn-inducer in its early sections, as the erotic action didn't come until halfway through the story. This isn't to say it was badly written; quite the contrary. I liked the skill at work here. But ultimately the same rules that govern any sort of good fiction also govern erotic myths: namely, don't bury us in dusty background when we want to get to the wham-bams.
The Live Novelists Club [A]
When posted: 10/28/97
Where posted: SSS (soc.sexuality.spanking)
Author: Astrakhan
Address: Astrakhan@nospam.demon.co.uk
Spanking fantasy is a very large subgenre of sexual fantasy, and one that has many subgenres of its own. One of them is the English boarding school story. Upper crust boys and girls were sent to these places from ages 6 to 16, where, in the words of the author, they are "subjected to the infantilisation that comes from a regime in which everything is either compulsory or forbidden, where permission has to be sought for almost any activity and where a rigorous uniform code suppresses any individuality. Whilst [students] could have written an entire book on autoeroticism, none was comfortable with the opposite sex." And of course, there are plenty of canings and strappings administered by matrons and headmasters.
Two teenage girls explore the woods around their school and find a small shack that is occupied by two boys from a neighboring boarding school. The four agree to share the place as a private hideout of sorts and call themselves the Live Novelists Club (a spoof on the Dead Poets society, I guess.) One day the boys brew some homemade beer there, and the girls get sick on it and are caught by their headmistress. Faced with expulsion or a strapping from their dads, they choose the strapping. Later they complain to the boys, and the story ends with the girls playfully inflicting the same punishment on them, in the rising passion of sexual awakening.
The English setting and attitudes made this story very good and perhaps a classic of its type. I liked the fact the girls acted like normal, awkward teenagers and didn't immediately glom onto anyone's cocks, like the smartass protag of "Virgin Mary Maguire" that I reviewed two weeks ago. But there were also enough fetishy touches in here for the most jaded spankophile, and the story had an almost...gentle...sense of humor as well. Veddy British. When I had done reading it, I felt cheered, and in the mood for a Monty Python marathon.
Dominatrix Found in Amber! [A-]
When posted: 10/29/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: PleaseCain
Address: PleaseCain@aol.com
The title of the story says it all. An astounding prehistoric find has been made: a black leather-clad dominatrix, frozen in mid-pounce, sealed inside a block of amber. This author has obviously intended to spoof tabloid headlines and contemporary kink culture, and he or she sets some tongue-in-cheek, well-written scenes in a museum, at a kinky new year bash (with insipid comments from the partygoers and TV hosts) and in Michael Jackson's house after the boy-child singer has purchased the petrified domina, apparently intending to mate her to an obese clone of Elvis. The story ends as the dominatrix is about to be freed, and it appears more chapters are coming. Overall, silly but very readable; should be fun for those who like spoofs.
Bird Watching [A-/B+]
When posted: 10/28/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Eoghann Irving
Address: eoghann@thenet.co.uk
Here's another story from England, about a young birdwatcher and his female pal Jenny. Mike goes to the shore to watch the gulls and plovers from the cliff, but trains his binoculars instead on a nude female sunbather. He starts to masturbate. His friend isn't too happy about it when she finds out, and challenges his arousal by doffing her own clothes and putting a finger up her pussy. They have sex, and later it transpires the two young friends are no longer friends, but lovers.
This story was an attempt to tell a story with sex in it, rather than a sexual fantasy designed to get you horny. For the record, *stories* are lot harder to write than *fantasies* because of the need for descriptive detail, a plot, characterization, story logic, linear motion, etc. This author is clearly heading down the right path. The writing and dialogue are technically good, so all that is needed now is more attention paid to detail. For example, in the story's beginning, I didn't quite know who Jenny was...a nosy neighbor? The narrator's sister? A girlfriend? It would be nice to know the character's ages, too, as I was picturing a middle-aged birdwatcher at first. I also question that two young friends would start masturbating in front of each other so quickly, and that a girl can come within five seconds of such masturbation. But the story was enjoyable, and I could imagine most of it happening to real people in the real world.
The Awakening [A]
When posted: 10/24/97
Where posted: ASSG
Author: Robert B. Morton II
Address: khaan@mindspring.com
A married man invites a friend in dire financial straits to stay with him until he gets his life straightened out. The friend is a feisty sort who challenges him to a wrestling match, and the narrator soon eggs on to the fact his friend is feeling him up! Annoyed, he tries to dismiss it from his mind, but soon decides he likes it very much, and when wifey is busy with the kids or visiting her mother, the two men fall in love and embark upon an affair.
What made this story interesting was the lucid, insightful tone of the narrator, especially when dealing with attraction and emotion. It's not often you here from an average Joe about an affair like this. As the narrator is black and his friend white the story also gets a thumbs-up for its positive depiction of racial relations, which is straightforward without being exploitive...that is, acknowledging racial differences without succumbing to stereotypes.
Batgirl vs. The Crime School for Girls, Part 5 [A+]
When posted: 10/12/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: S. Sneakly
Address: sneakly@geocities.com
Website: http://www.geocities.com/SoHo/5268/
This was the final episode of Sneakly's Batgirl adventure story, and it was well worth the wait. Bondage, perilous situations, multiorgasmic sex in those perilous situations, a thoroughly evil and unrepentant wicked lesbian villainess, and camp galore...what more can you ask for? Chapters 1 through 4 are available on the author's website, so if you haven't read the previous installments of this exciting adventure, do so now.
By the way, it's Cyrrh, not Crrh!
Batman Forever, 1 - 5 [A]
When posted: 10/6/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Roger T. Pipe
Address: Rogrtipe@ix.netcom.com
Here's another Batman adventure serial, this one based on the third movie starring Val Kilmer and Nicole Kidman. It's an interesting contrast with the Sneakly and Watchman stories, which focused on Batgirl.
Though many people think that the Batman movies have declined in quality since the first one, they still remain interesting psychological studies of America's favorite crimefighter and his foes. In "Batman Forever" Bruce Wayne visits a sexy psychoanalyst in the hopes of freeing himself from disturbing dreams, while Edward Nigma (aka The Riddler) goes slowly bonkers; Two-Face, meanwhile, camps it up as a victim of multiple personality disorder. The author of this story has a field day with these neurosises, speculating on the kink that occurs when explicit sex is added to the mix. Most of it involves the women in the story getting very turned on by acting like, and being treated like, randy slutty whores. Though a little disturbing, it fits in well with the overall dark, gothic tone of the movie.
For example, after a hard night of crimefighting Batman often goes looking for some prostitutes to have rough sex with; he can't abide the thought of loving sex with a normal, healthy woman at this time. Violence begats violence, even when it's done to protect the innocent. In the story Dr. Chase, who has the hots for Batman, foolishly thinks she's the woman for him because of her own lusts for domination and victimhood. When finally does have a sexual encounter with Batman, she realizes she's made an awful mistake as she tied to a desk and forcibly sodomized.
In sum, though the story deals with raw depictions of rape, near-rape, and mind controlled rape, it's well worth the read for the peek it gives at the dark secrets of Batman's sex life, and I am looking forward to future installments.