5/5/97 -- Superman as Superslave (anonymous); Debi-Me and the Mechanic (Debi); I've Got Huge Tits! [a mocking of spam] (Eli the Bearded); The Evil Queen, (mandible); You Bet! (anonymous); The First Full Day, The Ceremony, It's Her Turn Now, At Long, Long, Last, The Photo of E-Slave, by MarArch
5/11/97 -- Cat Scratch Fever, Catburglars, Sister Act by PJurado; Warrior, Healer, Goddess (zilber); Shocking Times (Sven the Elder); The Clinic for Women (The Hoser); Erotic Dungeon (TXPleasure); A Gynecology Exam to Remember (Scott S. Stevens)
5/18/97 "Elton John" -- Minding Mike (Paddy Toutte); Justin (Part One) (xnarcissus); The Fitness Instructor (sceparal); First Time Adventure (theveryred); Let Me Know if You Like This (videos69)
5/21/97 -- 100% Woman, 200% Bitch, Devine Submission (sillygoose); DiscoSlut (Suzie SleaZe); Kathy (Lisa Cohn); The Spa (Suckle); Disney Erotic Fanfic (various)
This is the first posting of a new series of reviews called "The Annex Reviews." It is intended as a companion piece/rebuttal/adjunct to "Celestial Reviews." As my tastes are somewhat more catholic (excuse the pun) than Celeste's, I will be reviewing and critiquing the unusual, the kinky, and the funky...and also giving attention to past-ignored efforts in the ASS arena: gay, lesbian and Bi fiction. This review will be coming out at least once a month, more if I have the time. I can't in all faith guarantee reviews of stories sent to me for critique, so it's probably best not to send them. I can't guarantee prompt replies to email, either.
My rating system is different than Celeste's. I use a straight grade, A++ to D-, sometimes splitting it. What I give high marks to are, in descending order of importance: originality, creativity, skillful use of the English language, and technical things like grammar and spelling. A poorly written dog can get a A+ because of its originality of conception, and a well-written chestnut like wife swapping can get a C simply because it's been done before. (Of course, my personal tastes figure in also. I don't review stories that bore me.) Below the rating is when the story appeared. I realize that stories may appear on different servers at different times, but hopefully the date will give a rough idea of where to look. Below the date is where the story appeared (ASS = alt.sex.stories; ASSM = alt.sex.stories.moderated; ASSG = alt.sex.stories.gay; ASSB = alt.sex.stories.bondage.) After that is the name of the author or poster.
So, here are the stories for the week of May 5th.
Superman as Superslave [A/C+]
When posted: 5/5/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Anonymous
Reposted by: Kisinkyle
Address: kisinkyle@AOL.com
This is one of the many superhero sex stories that have been appearing lately. There were two more in this batch, "Superman Caught!!!" and "Superman and Bonds." All three seem to have been written by the same author. Titillating reading for those both gay and straight who have wondered about Superman's hithero ignored sex life.
In this story Lois Lane, tired of being spurned by Superman all these years, sets him up for a gay gangbang with Lex Luthor. Apparantly she finds Lex's sexy bald pate a bigger turn-on than the Man of Steel's tight unitards. Anyway, Lex renders our hero powerless by forcing him to eat a mixture of red and green kryptonite, then forces him to give blowjobs to at least 200 horny men of various ethnic groups (a clever touch, considering Metropolis is a fill-in for NYC.) I won't spoil the rest, but things seem pretty hopeless for Clark Kent's alter-ego.
While this story deserves an A for sheer audacity, the author could benefit from a basic creative writing class detailing the correct uses of POV, exposition, dialogue and paragraph construction...so be forewarned, Neil Gaiman it ain't. Hence the split rating.
Debi--Me and the Mechanic [A]
When posted: 5/3/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Debi? (reposted by THC Adult Text Archive)
Here is a very rare beast, a story written from a female POV in which an older woman goes on the stalk for a younger man (a blonde stud who works in her neighborhood gas station.) The couple have hot sex in her van as it's waiting for its lube job (!) and afterward embark on an affair. There are too few stories like this. I myself often read posts on ASSG to get my female predatory instincts sated. (Change the narrator's sex and it works great as a gay story, too.) A few more original touches would have gotten it an A+.
I've Got Huge Tits! [a mocking of spam] [A++]
When posted: 5/5/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Eli the Bearded
Address: usenet-tag@qz.little-neck.ny.us
Screamingly funny satire of the spam found on ASS and other newsgroups of this ilk. Ya GOTTA read this. Be prepared to wet your pants (by any combination of bodily fluids).
The Evil Queen [A-]
When posted: 5/1/97
Where posted: ASSM
Author: mandible
Address: jawbone@ass.com
Faithful knight Dirk Trustbearer has been captured by evil Queen Anoxia, who coats him in aphrodisiac goo to make him her sex slave. Fortunately, he's saved by his true love Aerial, who breaks the spell by letting him take her virginity...or rather she shoves it at him. A raunchy romp that also works as an amusing pastiche of sword and sorcery fantasy. I'm a sucker for erotica that utilizes fantasy elements. The genres are more alike than you know. Not to give away the twist ending, but I'd think most men would find watching nude women wrestling in jello more arousing than being coated in it themselves.
I would have liked more intelligence and originality put into the writing style, But then I'm a hard critic when it comes to fantasy. I think most readers, male and female, should find this story very yummy.
You Bet! [B]
When posted: 4/20/97
Where posted: ASSG
Author: ??
A 13-year-old and a 14-year-old boy make a football bet with each other; the loser has to give the winner blowjobs for a month. Of course, the narrator loses, but gains various sexual experiences which include a small taste of D/s, which he finds very enjoyable.
The author states "This story is about pubescent boys playing sexual games with each in a search for their personal identities, about the kinds of positioning for social dominance that boys engage in, about excitement, about sports, and ab>out a lot of things. It's not about pain or rape." and it's true. This story did have a rather sweet, nostalgic tone which less enlightened and more reactionary folks would consider at odds with its subject matter. But I could easily imagine real kids thinking and acting like this.
The author has requested feedback on this story, but apparantly has used one of those anonymous emailer thingies. Guess the only way to reply is to look up the original post and pop off a note directly from the browser.
The First Full Day [A+]
The Ceremony [A+]
It's Her Turn Now [A+]
At Long, Long Last [A+]
The Photo of E-Slave [A+]
When posted: 5/4/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: MarArch
Address: MarArch@ix.netcom.com
Very hot BDSM erotica, definately a "two-pinter." Just two nameless people, their basic gear, and their physical sensations. "It's Her Turn Now" and "At Long Long Last" deal with the man as the sub, the others with a woman. These stories are an excellent read, especially for women who want something harder than, say, Anne Rice's "Sleeping Beauty Books" but aren't up to the pain and misogyny that often manifests itself in fiction of this type (as in Steven S. Davis's work.) A four-part story was posted also, "Conquering Texas" but I haven't read it yet. Whoever they are, this person can WRITE.
My fave of the five? "Photo."
Here's another week's worth of reviews. This week we have a new
feature, guest reviews. Remember, I can't in all faith guarantee reviews
of stories sent to me for critique, so it's probably best not to send them. I
can't always guarantee prompt replies to email, either, though
comments are certainly welcome.
Cat Scratch Fever [A/C]
Catburglars [A/C]
Sister Act [A/C]
When posted: Week of 5/5/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: P. Jurado
Address: PJurado@aol.com
Anapuma and Unipuma are two genetically altered catgirls who, when they're not getting into trouble with the Tank Police of future Earth, spend most of their time licking each other's pussies in the shower. These stories are based on Japanese cartoons call anime which often feature explicit sex and violence--far more than what you'd see on "Aeon Flux" or even Ralph Bakshi's 1970s work, for that matter. (Side note: An animator friend of mine who knew him described him as "a very angry guy.") Anime has a fanatic following here in the states and there are even whole conventions devoted to it. This author is obviously a fan. If you are a hardcore anime fan, and enjoy fantasizing about the mindless violence and sex lives of these heavily stylized characters, you might want to read these. (The author also has a website-- http://members.aol.com.PJurado/index.html--that lists more anime, sf and fantasy-oriented erotica that he or she has written. Oddly, only the titles are listed; the stories aren't available for download.)
But as a long-time anime fan myself (my favorite is "Blue Sonnet") and a fan of erotica as well, I have to ask myself the question, Why read about big-eyed, Tina Turner-haired slutbabes when you can go to the video store and rent the original cartoons? Though the author writes competently and the story follows the plotline, action and dialogue of the anime very closely, these stories didn't do a lot for me. I guess it comes down to what author Joanna Russ says about analyzing sexual fantasy: "....only those for whom a sexual fantasy 'works,' that is, those who are aroused by it, have a chance of telling us to what particular conditions that fantasy speaks.". So, an A for hardcore anime fans and a C for non-fans, who are likely to find it juvenile and incomprehensible.
This author also posted a survey recently on what anime stories readers would like to see. I'd like to read about the sex lives of Speed Racer and Marine Boy. Oh, and Ultraman, too.
On a similar note, anyone wanna write about the erotic adventures of Josie and the Pussycats?
Warrior, Healer, Goddess [A]
When posted: 5/2/97
Where posted: ASSM
Author: Zilber
Address: zilber@poboxes.com
A warrioress saves a slave girl destined to be sacrificed as a funerary offering in ancient Mesopotamia. The two become lovers and travel together to the sacred city. All the familiar touchstones of feminist/lesbian fantasy are present: amazons, priestesses, a Goddess, patriarchal horse clans who keep the women down. At times it felt like Marion Zimmer Bradley's work.
This was a well written, tender account of lesbian sex, rather less explicit than the usual fare on ASS and its sattelites, but how can one resist phrases like "Ah, sweet, thy young cunt is like a flower, opening to my fingers." This makes "cunt" into high romance. The story was also interesting because of its historical nature and the formal dialogue style the author employed added to the fun.
Now, it's very easy for revisionist feminists like Camille Paglia to make fun of a story like this. Or for males to feel like their penises are about to be cut off. But truly, I found it a good read--though unfortunately the ending was itself cut off, so a repost by the author is suggested. If the purpose of the author when writing a sex story is to entertain you, get you hot, and experience and understand different kinds of sexuality than you normally would, this author did a good job. It is also refreshing to read about romantic consensual sex between women from a female viewpoint. It gets enervating to keep reading about supermodels who 69 at the drop of a hat for no other reason than to provide male titillation.
Shocking Times (REPOST) [A]
When posted: 5/5/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Sven the Elder
Poster: The Warthog
Address: warthog@boxtwo.com
Last week I hinted wife-swapping stories were done to death, but I just had to review this one. The two couples in question came across as real people and the sex was hot, yet grounded in reality. (Double points because one of the couples is in their 50s and the story addresses some of the issues of age.) The author comes across as an intelligent, responsible fellow. I picture him as an older Norse gent with thinning yet still- flaxen hair and a reddish beard, wearing a plaid shirt and suspenders while writing his stories by a paned picture window that overlooks a garden overflowing with wallflowers, foxgloves, and Icelandic poppies. So there. I liked it!
Now on to this week's guest reviewer, the inimitable Mr. Spraycan.
(Drum roll, please.)
"The Clinic for Women" by The Hoser h20boy@hotmail.com
Filed 4/25/97, alt.sex.stories
Why am I a sucker for this kind of medical procedural story? It's obviously some manufacturing defect in my biopentium chip, some childhood trauma. What exactly is the appeal of a factual, unerotic piece about a woman being examined, prodded and examined like a lump of meat?
"Clinic" starts out with the unnamed her being told to report to the clinic. No reason is given. She's expected to be menstruating, in a very novel twist for erotic fiction. There's no set-up, no story, no plot, just a recitation -- like a to/from memo from some totally impersonal healthcare droid -- of what she's going to undergo after checking into the clinic: the usual gynie legs-up exam, enemas, then a bladder control test. "the Technician will connect a syringe to the catheter and fill your bladder with sterile water. You will feel a very strong urge to urinate as your bladder becomes full. Next the Technician will slowly remove the catheter while leaving the electrode in place in your bladder. You will then be helped off of the exam table and escorted to a special commode seat ... You will first be instructed just to hold your urine while your bladder pressure is measured. Next you will be instructed to start your urine flow just momentarily and then stop it. The technician will repeat this test about 3 times to measure your bladder control. You will then be instructed to urinate normally until your bladder is empty."
After this, she'll undergo various indignities to the rectum and g.i. tract as x-rays and scans are made. But despite all the clumsiness and style faults, I bet you read it to the end.
Here's another particularly romantic excerpt from later in the story: "After the exam is completed the colonoscope will be removed and you will be instructed to lie on your stomach. The exam table will positioned to elevate your hips. You will then be instructed to expel the air from your colon. It is important to expel as much air as possible to prevent abdominal cramps and to prepare you for further tests. The technician may insert a tube in your rectum to aid in expelling the air if necessary." Toot toot!
Sounds like she'll be there a while, with the author promising us at the end: "Your doctor will prescribe certain therapies based on these tests..."
Things I'd have added, if I'd written it: an audience of student doctors, pre-meds, video recording. But fewer x-rays! She'll be glowing in the dark!
The Hoser (a new writer?), in a personal e-mail reply, promises us the sequel soon. /mrspraycan
Erotic Dungeon by TXPleasure
txpleasure@aol.com
Filed 5/9/97, alt.sex.stories, and -.moderated.
A new writer, always a pleasure to see. She (a guess) takes a romantic stab at a dungeon scene. It's rather 'soft porn' in tone, but it works. It's not heavy on BDSM action, more a talk piece, but the tension is maintained throughout. You find yourself believing it, at times. Tension and anticipation is often better than meat-in-motion action in erotica, anyway.
The narrator is taken blindfolded to a club, somewhere she's familiar with from a previous visit as a voyeur, but not as a player. Now, though, she's committed herself to her master. He is with her, and has her undress. He leads her around, describing and reminding her of various tables, crosses, other restraint hardware there. Puts her in cuffs and collar. She's going to perform, perhaps just for him, perhaps for the happy hour crowd. (If they are there, this is a darned quiet crowd, since there's just whispering in the background.) She gets tit-clamped, fucked merrily (by him). She wakes up on display (still blindfolded) in a bed at center of the club.
Ending is a little mild, with the dreaded 'luuhhhhv' emerging as she is allowed to dress, is unblindfolded, and sees 'da man what brung her', and is now taking her home. Hope the club membership is cheap, they sound a pretty dull bunch! /mrspraycan
(Note: Lady Cyrrh has read this story and gives it a B, with an "A" for effort.)
A Gynecology Exam to Remember by "Scott S. Stevens"
sstevens@omnifest.uwm.edu
Filed 5/9/97, alt.sex.stories, and -.moderated.
Women! Stay away from University of Wisconsin-Madison! Or rush there, depending on your tastes. This chap, a pre-med, describes his first solo gynie exam. The revelations involve a walk-in patient named Sarah, the usual stacked, smoldering 32-year-old. She insists on having her impressive tits felt, insists on a rectal exam and boogies up and down on his finger. She can't wait to get in the stirrups and spread 'em, wants him to skip the rubber gloves for the twat exam, says he should warm the speculum in his mouth . . . you know, realistic stuff.
She starts to get hot: "I was trying to understand this woman. Perhaps she was a nyphomaniac, or had emotional disorders, or a low self esteem that causes her to seek validation through sex with health care providers, or maybe she was just horny and wanted me." Sure. She starts to come, and he's worrying if she's going to have an asthma attack. She grabs him and pulls him down, face first into her muff. Quick, nurse, wheeze wheeze, where's the albuterol!
It ends with him getting a blow job and her saying, of course, "anytime." The giveaway for non-authenticity comes with the doofus sign-off: "If there are any guys out there who are jealous of their wifes or girlfriend who have male gynecologists, you should be...I'm told by many that this shit happens all the time. If there are any ladies who would like to share their similar experiences with me, feel free to do so."
I suspect a forged header on this story, BTW. Though the writer does know his med jargon and physiology, even if his spellchecker is broken elsewhere.
Reading stories like this always reminds me of the scene in Schwartzenegger's "Last Action Hero," where all the women in the video rental store look like drop-dead beautiful models. When he's asked if this can be real he's told "We're in California, kid." Well, this is Madison, WI, kid. Swarming with nympho women with alarmingly green eyes and huge hooters, eager to get the finger and suck your dingus. Quick, what's the Ryder Truck 800 number? /mrspraycan
This month I'm going to start things with a different kind of
review. A record review, to be precise. A twenty-five year old
record review. I'm talking about Elton John's "Goodbye Yellow
Brick Road" which was all the rage when I was in grade school in
1974.
A friend gave me this tape and I've been listening to it every morning as I drive to work. I haven't thought or listened much to EJ after the age of 12 or so, so it was a pleasant surprise to rediscover what a talented pop craftsman he was (is?) and how sexually radical he was for a lightweight pop star in 1973. Yes, I know Frank Zappa, Cheech and Chong, the Virgin Fugs, and probably many others I've never heard of were more sexually explicit, but they were hardly the teenybopper household names that EJ was. Neither did they get the radio play. And, in a similar vein, although David Bowie was still hot from Ziggy Stardust and Aladdin Sane he tackled sexual issues only in throwaway mentions--the "god-given ass" in "Ziggy Stardust" and the "Suck baby suck, give me your head" in "Cracked Actor." Despite his bisexual space-cadet image (and his earlier dresses) Bowie wasn't as straightforwardly narrative as the still-in-the-closet EJ in 1973.
Back to "Yellow Brick Road." The title song of the album is obviously an anthem about a kept boy's disillusionment with the high society folks who keep him, and use him, in every sense of the word. Another song, "All the Young Girls Love Alice" is about a young girl who is preyed upon sexually by older women: "All the young girls love Alice, Alice, sweet Alice, they say. Won't you give me your number, won't you come down and please me, but wait till my husband's away." Then there is "Love Lies Bleeding" which sounds suspiciously like a gay love affair gone bad. I could be wrong about the songs, as there was no lyric sheet with the tape and EJ, though a superb vocalist, is unintelligible at times, so if anyone can shed light on the lyrics or what these songs really mean, please drop me a line so I will know if I'm barking up the wrong tree. I would certainly like to know where he is on the sexual spectrum right now.
On to the stories.
Minding Mike [A-]
When posted: 5/9/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Paddy Toutte
Address: paddy22@aol.com
What do you do when your neighbor has left you alone to watch over her 16-year-old son who's burned his hands in an accident and can't urinate without help? I won't say anymore; read for yourself. No cum-drenched erotic action, but something very sweet, very real, and very true to life. The only thing detracting from the realism is the fact Mom gives her son a milk bottle to pee in. I'd think a bucket would be more appropriate, considering the aim of some men in family bathrooms.
Justin (Part One) [B/B-]
When posted: 5/6/97
Where posted: ASSG
Author: Xnarcissus
Address: xnarcissus@aol.com
The nameless teen narrator of the story invites Justin, the class president, over to his house to watch dirty movies. After being stimulated by the video action, he gives Justin a steamy blowjob. This story is to be continued.
The author writes well enough (except for a few mistakes like being incensed--"to make extremely angry" in my dictionary--by his partner's cock; perhaps "aroused" was meant, because he was sucking in lust rather than fury) so what knocked points off this one was inattention to setup and detail. How old were these kids? What did they look like? How long has the narrator been scheming to get Justin where he wants him? Even more puzzling, the story about the seduction of Justin had a byline of being written by Justin. Was this intended as an oblique frame of reference or a third-person autobiographical account? Overall the story felt incomplete even considering it's a first installment, but the sex was good, so I'd like to see more.
The Fitness Instructor [D-]
When posted: 5/7/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Sceparal
Address: scepara1@ic3.ithaca.edu
Some people ask for it. They really do. This story has the dubious distinction of receiving my first "D-." The narrator of the piece is a brain-dead moron who fantasizes about receiving a butt-rape from his or her personal fitness instructor. I say his or her because the story is so poorly written the gender of the narrator is a blank. The instructor orders the narrator out of bed, makes him or her exercise, then showers, leaving pubic hairs in the drain, and enlivens the next few sessions by scratching her crotch. Guess she has crabs. This story was about as sexy as stepping into a freshly vomited hairball. A sad slur on Ithaca college, one of the most scenically situated educational institutions in upper New York State.
First Time Adventure [C-]
When posted: 5/15/97
Where posted: ASSM
Author: Theveryred
Address: theveryred@aol.com
The narrator of this story has always fantasized about having sex with a woman, and finally gets her chance with the 52-year-old wife of an old friend. The story sounded natural and true to life, but was clumsily written and dull, disregarding such grammatical niceties as quotation marks and mixing up present and past tense, as well as ignorant usage of the English language (saying "I am captured by their bodies" when she means "captivated"). Skip this unless you're a die-hard fan of first-time lesbian encounters.
Let Me Know if You Like This [B+]
When posted: 5/6/97
Where posted: ASSG
Author: Videos69
Address: videos69@aol.com
A bisexual college student travels to France as part of his International Studies major. He spends more time looking at the guys than the girls. First he gets a hand job from a good-looking young man on the flight in, then has an erotic encounter with a Scandinavian on the train to the Riviera. This was more of a casual personal memoir than a story, but it was entertaining nonetheless, and written with the goofball, enthusiastic tone of Bill-and-Ted's-Bisexual-Erotic-Adventures-Abroad. The author wants to know if you like this.
Do I like this? Oui.
This is a midweek edition of "The Annex Reviews." For this
installment we will look at fanfic, firsts, and fantasy.
"100% Woman, 200% Bitch...." A story for females to read, if you
DARE [B-/B+]
"Devine Submission" A story for females to read, if you DARE [B-
/B+]
When posted: 5/15/97
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Sillygoose
Address: sillygoose@earthling.net
I DARED.
Both these stories were written by the same author; "Devine Submission" (sic) is a tighter, shorter rework of "100% Woman." Written in second person ("There's a hand stroking your ass...") both detail what a nameless man--and his named German Shepard--would do to a woman he has tied face-down to a four- poster bed as they enact his fantasies. Taking the two stories together, there's bestiality, licking, humiliation, an enema, a three-way, and a doggy-style gangbang as the woman is treated just like a bitch in heat, with collar and everything.
As literature this gets a B- for all the misspellings ("kneal" for kneel, "Devine" for "Divine" etc.) and the lack of attention paid to plot, character and detail, making it unentertaining for the average reader. But taking it as the personal jack-off it is, I found it hot, hence the B+.
This brings up a discussion of the differences between the personal jack-off, porn, and erotica on ASS. All three are sexual fantasy, which to my mind is no different than other forms of fantasy such as science fiction, epic myths, or sword and sorcery. Which is precisely what makes them so interesting, as they connect to something deep within the human psyche. To put it as simply as I can, erotica has a plot, characters and/or literary style, while porn gets you hot as bluntly and quickly as possible. The personal jack-off is an open expression of someone's sexual desires, often addressed to a lover or potential lover. I'm not too fond of these, as the style often requires you to follow the writer's instructions ("As you rub your hot, wet pussy...") in a game of make-believe that is ultimately pretty pathetic for normal, intelligent adults sitting in front of a computer screen. It's like those dumb little paragraphs describing the models in Penthouse and Playboy. Does anyone really read those things and take them seriously? Anyway, these stories were a form of personal jack-off in that, at the end, the author wants to know if they turned any women on and if they did, to please strike up a correspondence with him.
Which brings up the same point Celeste would make: Why would any sane woman want to be treated the way the woman is in this guy's fantasies? The answer is, IT'S A FANTASY. It exists in a murky realm totally unrelated to real life. Could a dog ever be well-trained enough to get erect on command and hump a human female for more than a few seconds? Would a man really give a woman an enema on his expensive four-poster bed without rubber sheets? Of course not. I would not want to experience any of this in real life, nor is it one of my fantasies, but it sure is fun to read about it, putting yourself in the position of a voyeur of these activities. It's the IDEA that is the turn-on in the fantasy, not the identification with the characters in it, which is what people often forget when they judge these fantasies. So, there's no way in hell I would take the German Shepard owner up on his rather graphic come-on, but it was enjoyable reading about it.
These stories bring up another point. Are there any women out there who sincerely like being called "bitch" "slut" and "whore" in a demeaning way in the course of sexual activities? That is, really dig it, as opposed to just pretending they do to make their partner happy.
The next three stories come from our friends in the United
Kingdom.
"DiscoSlut" Story by Suzie SleaZe [A]
When posted: 5/17/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Suzie SleaZe
Address: 101445.2670@compuserve.com
Suzy Sleaze likes being called a slut.
Hot, extremely raunchy porn as Suzie Sleaze and her sleazy husband Mick dress up in white lycra and white leather and go to a disco, where they participate in exhibitionistic dancing, then have a gangbang in the men's room which includes pissing on each other. If this author is indeed a female, and the story reflective of her own fantasies, she truly glories in being happily depraved. After every act you think no, she can't possibly can't get any sluttier, then she does...like a female Terminator coming back for more. At times all the cum, saliva, and piss reminded me of preschoolers smearing fingerpaints all over each other. This is surprising to me as most of the female fantasies/stories I've read don't go into enthusiastic descriptions of body fluids that much--it's more of a male thing. It may be that "Suzie Sleaze" is really a man writing about a fantasy woman.
But maybe not, as it's also clear Suzie is in control of her own behavior and is acting out of her own desires. She's not a victim; she's an aggressor. She makes being a filthy slut empowering, in a way. Stick that in your pipe and smoke it, femdom!
Sylistically, there was something out of date about this story--I can't decide if it's meant to be retro-hip or that the author is still enmired in a 1970s world of Jackie Susann novels, Cosmopolitan magazines, discotheques, and tight exercise clothes. After all, these days the hip go to raves or ambient clubs with house music. In baggy jeans that hang off their asses. But when something is this hot and slutty, who cares?
Kathy [B]
When posted: 5/16/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Lisa Cohn
Poster: mrdouble@ix.netcom.com
Thirteen-year-old Kathy takes a train ride alone to visit her father. She meets a boy her own age and has her first sexual experience. Not rushed, not brutal, not exploitive, but inquisitive, innocent and sweet.
Although I personally liked the story enough to give it a higher grade, what knocked points off was that it took so long to get to the sex, and the author was not a skilled enough writer to create reader interest with the buildup. There are also inconsistencies: for example, it's mentioned Kathy's seen her brother's cock before, but when she sees the boy's she states that it's her first.
The Spa [C]
When posted: 5/15/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Steve
Address: Suckle@HotPickle.net
One bland couple goes to the house of another. In the course of drinking wine in the hot tub, they share their fantasies, and wind up having a foursome.
You wouldn't think a four-way would be boring, but it came off that way. Michael did this. Jenny did that. Then Mary joined in. Put slot A in slot B, fold flap over. This was supposed to be someone's actual experience...but, like most real-life experiences, sex acts need embellishment and a good storytelling technique to make them something interesting to hear about.
Disney erotic fanfic [A]
When posted: 5/17/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Various
Poster: Col. Kink
Address: no@no.no
A batch of Disney-related erotic fanfic has appeared lately where the familiar cartoon characters do things old Walt, or even Michael Eisner, would be shocked at. You might wonder what kind of adult would pervert a child's movie like this, but the truth is all of these were playful in spirit and lots of fun. Of course, the nice thing about writing fanfic is you only have to work on the plot--the characters, settings, and the descriptions of them already being familiar to the reader and writer from the film, comic or TV show. There were more of these than the ones I've reviewed here, so if you want to find the rest, I suggest a search using the keyword Disney.
Although all posted by the same person, these stories appear to have been written by different authors, some of whom are credited, some not. Note to reposters: In the future please include the name and email address, if known, of the original poster. It makes it easier to facilitate correspondence with them and result in the generation of more great stories.
Disney: Ariel's First Masturbation
Author: ?
One of the things that always bothered me about Disney's "The Little Mermaid" was her name. "Ariel" is the name of an air sprite (in Shakespeare) and the Little Mermaid lives in the sea. Wouldn't Undina be more appropriate? Anyway, a sweet little story detailing Ariel's examination of her new human body. Not excitingly sexy, but a logical development from the movie.
Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 1
Disney: Little Mermaid in Bondage - Part 2
Author: ??
The author's titles for these two are "Prince Eric's Amusement" and "Ariel's Continuing Education."
After her wedding Ariel discovers her new husband is into BDSM. He introduces her to the delights of his dungeon. The scenario follows the standard newcomer-to-the-scene plotline with some unique twists from the movie: instead of nipple clamps, Sebastien the crab uses his claws, and for another torture Ariel is double- plugged and forced to swim in a skintight mermaid sheathe fin. This was the best-written of the stories that I read and the most true to the characters--Sebastien, Flounder and Ariel really WOULD act this way in this situation. There's also a plea for sexual tolerance (Prince Eric says, "Anything that takes place in private between consenting adults is legal and exempt from royal censure. It's only when it involves real abuse or children that the Kingdom takes an interest.") with an interesting side plot about gay mermaids and mermen coming out from "under the shell."
Jafar's Revenge
Author: Pencildragon
Address: pdragon@ziplink.net
Jafar escapes from his lamp in the Cave of Wonders and conspires with his parrot Iago for sexual revenge on Aladdin and Jasmine. Cute, not brutal, despite the title. There's B/D between the enspelled couple, then Raja the tiger pleasures Jasmine with his tongue, then Aladdin is changed into a woman for some lesbian sex. There were two more Jasmine stories I didn't read: "Jasmine's Monkey Business" and "Jasmine's Wedding Night." On author Elf Sternberg's homepage (www.halcyon.com/elf/journals) there's some more Jasmine stories listed under "Other fiction."
Disney: Tickling (Cinderella, Ariel, Belle, Jasmine)
Author: hlprice@prairienet.org
The title the author gave is "The Wonderful World of Tickling."
The framing device between these four vignettes is that the protag has a magical video camera that lets him travel into cartoon-land (as in Ralph Bakshi's "Cool World") to film well- tickled Disney heroines at their most helpless. This one was hilarious. No sex, unless you consider tickling a form of sex. My favorite was when the talking mice have a go at licking Cinderella's clit.
Hmmm. Let me repeat the question I mentioned first. What kind of adult would pervert children's movies like this?