Hypnotic Eye Beams Feedback
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# of Ratings |
Avg. Smoke (1-5) |
Avg. Heat (1-5) |
Avg. Writing (1-5) |
Avg. Hypnosis Scenes (1-5) |
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4 |
3.75 |
4.25 |
4.75 |
4.75 |
Read the story, not expecting to like it
since it was md and from the title. But I had just gone to your smoking fetish
story site, and since I loved the hypnodomne next door decided to give it a
try. Anyway they're both great. Since md doesn't really do it for me, it was
more the characters arc that I liked and the humor in Hypnotic Eye beams
Just a quick note to say how much I enjoyed
the most recent story of yours, "Hypnotic Eye Beams". The inherent realism
and the ( I hope) coincidental parallels with my own life with my wife were
fascinating, as well as just a great read.
Hi I really enjoyed the first part of your
story Hypnotic Eye Beams.
I really enjoyed this story of yours, but I
was left in quite a cliffhanger at the end of chapter three. I love the
hypnotic obedience phrases and the way the main character has found himself in
that incredible situation almost by accident (with just a little push on his
part). I would certainly love to see what are his plans for his girlfriend and
their friend now that he has found out he can control them both at once and
without any of them noticing. It certainly has potential for a lot of hypnotic
master-controlled fantasies.
Not really interested in the smoking scenes,
but the writing of the story was very well done. I especially like how
realisticly you portray the slide of the character into control of his subject,
and the way in which you portray his (successful) attempts at changing her
behavior.
First off, I love the direction you've taken
with the plot. You've written it exactly the way I would like to have seen it
continue. As far as the basic storyline, I wouldn't ask you to change a thing.
Thank you so much for your
story, Hypnotic Eye Beams!!! I have loved MC stories for so long -- ever since
I read Night Music ten years ago!!! Night Music was the 2nd MC/hypno story I
ever found, and my fantasy life has never been the same since then. You have
such a great writing style, and as with Night Music, you have set the bar very
high for everyone in this genre with your latest story.
My next donation to ASSTR I
will be sure to do in your honor
This guy has the right idea! If you like reading at ASSTR, donate! -Pen
I would had graded it with a
5 for hot, but I felt that at the end there was something missing. I was
expecting a long final descriptive scene with both girls hypnotized at
the same time, as you had suggested at some point on part six with the line:
"If I was careful, and didn't rush anything, I stood a great chance of
being in the middle of two naked, gorgeous, hypnotized babes that night."
That is my only complain. In that regard, I loved the end of chapter four for
that same reason: the scene with Carrie was so descriptive and full of hypnotic
trances that it really made my day. That's why I think having both girls
entranced at the same time would have been explosive. =)
I loved the characters and the storytelling. I liked the fact that even if
Terry had succumbed to temptation, he still loved his girlfriend and was
mindful for her happiness (in his very particular way). All in all, one of the
best stories I had read from you. Thanks for it!