This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Line
Lousy Bloggs
By
Valerie Meilong <meilong@excite.com>
She was Christened Louisa Katerina Bloggs. She hated her names and was determined to have them changed one day.
She was teased at school. The girls called her lousy Bloggs, or catty Bloggs. Because she was pretty? Maybe. Who knows?
Her father frequently spanked her, always on the bare bottom, not because she deserved it; he liked taking her panties down. Her mother thought this kooky, but what the hell? She ran off with a truck driver when Louisa was seven.
While she was in Middle School Louisa learned that she'd a valuable asset; her body. Boys gave her sweets for the privilege of touching it. She lost her virginity in her first year in High School in return for a cheap watch. The boy went off to college. Deep down she kept a torch burning for him; her unforgettable first fuck.
She left school at seventeen. Her experiences of financial gain for the use of her body naturally led her into prostitution. One day she met an oldish man who asked her to beat him. Offered to pay well too. She accepted. Money was money.
She enjoyed the experience. While doing it she fantasised she was beating her father. Revenge.
She discovered beating was a niche market. Other men demanded the same service. She kept the price high, but gave good service and was discreet. Business flourished.
Thirty-five years later George Murphy was visited by a lawyer. A Ms. Payne, spinster, with no living relatives, had died. George was the sole beneficiary of a tidy sum, why, he knew not. The estate included a house. Intrigued, he went to see it. It stood alone, some way outside the town. On the outside it looked ordinary, but it had a cellar, dimly lit, with chains and cuffs fastened to the walls. There was a flogging frame, and a rack of whips. Another door led to a small schoolroom with desks. Near the blackboard hung several canes. Tools of the trade, presumably. In an office filing cabinet upstairs were hundreds of photographs, mostly close-ups of a female's private parts. For sale? Probably. Others showed a gowned blousy-looking woman, presumably Ms. Payne, wielding a cane over naked men, their faces away from the camera. Also for sale? Souvenirs? Titillation?
But why had she left her money to him? He'd never visited a brothel in his life, certainly never to a Dom. Yet the woman's face looked familiar.
He explored the rest of the house. Nothing out of the ordinary.
Eventually he came to the attic. Peering through the cobwebs, he noticed a tall object covered in a sheet. He removed it. It was a magnificent portrait of a beautiful naked girl. It was dated and signed. It was an early work by a famous artist. On the back was written, presumably by the artist, "To the lovely Dorothea Payne."
He gasped as the memories of his first sexual experience flooded back. It was Louisa!
"Oh yes," he thought. Dorothea was perfectly lovely.
The End
© Copyright Valerie Meilong 18 August 2003
Author's note: When I wrote this I realised that there is a problem when writing stories for the SSC using first/last lines. If the last line had been left out the story could be categorised as Adult. Suppose I'd enlarged on the spanking Louisa got from her father. Would that categorise the story as Child? Suppose I had enlarged on the bit where Louisa's clients liked to dress up as a schoolboy to be caned by her while she was dressed as a teacher. Would that categorise the story as age-play? Suppose at the end she'd been murdered. Would that categorise it as Edge? Suppose the story had been set in the nineteenth century. Would that categorise the story as Period? Get my point? A story using a specified first or last line can be any of these categories.
Reviews
Patricia <patricia(at)cedar(dot)net>
This was an interesting story. I suspected George Murphy was Louisa's first. Your use of the First/Last line was adequate, but since you had to change Louisa's name to make this work, I feel the story should have included some explanation for the change in name. As it stands, it feels too much like the name was changed just to make the story work for the First/Last line category. I suspect Dorothea is her business name, but some explanation would have helped the story, in my opinion.
Don A. Landhill <dlandhill(at)aol(dot)com>
The challenge line seemed kind of grafted on. When did KLB become Dorathea Payne (a neat last name if it was a scene alias)? If it had read: A Ms. Dorothea Payne, spinster, with no living relatives.... it would have set up the ending line better. Aside from that, the story was nice enough, showing the progression from innocent to roué and showing that people do age and die, which is rare in the course of a 500 word story. But somehow it just didn't grab me and wind me in.
Rosa
This poor girl sure had a pretty rough time of it, but obviously had at least one unforgettable
and enjoyable memory! A nice twist in the use of the last line. Thank you for
entering this unique story!