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Category:  Parody/Repost
A parody of Herriot's Ford by R. Kipling.  This was first posted 10 April 2003.
 

First Place

Harriet's Fears

By

Don A. Landhill <DLandhill@aol.com>
 

"What's that that dangles at your side?"
"The crop that you must take, my girl."
"That looks to pain my tender hide?"
"It's bite is sharp, not fake, my girl."

"Then leave my dress against the blows!"
"That boundary is long past, my girl.
I want to see your sunset-glow,
For judgement now comes fast, My girl."

"Oh who will stay the crop's descent?"
"None halts the Fury's tread, my girl."
"I need an hour to repent!"
"That's what you've always said, my girl"

"Oh do not whip me unprepared!"
"You're safe a while with me, my girl."
"Nay, start it now – for I am scared!"
"and more scared you shall be, my girl."

"Where is the pain that I must face?"
"Three little swats away my girl."
"Then mend this session's laggard pace!"
"I want you fresh next day, my girl"

"Next day – next day!  Unloose my cords!"
"At first you needed none, my girl.
You would not mind.  You said, 'I'm bored'
You know you're having fun, my girl."

"You would not mark with stripe and weal?"
"Tis thus all newbies cry, my girl."
"I dare not ponder what I'll feel."
"think of it and get high, my girl."

"Then wipe the sweat from brow and cheek."
"It gushes forth afresh, my girl."
"Uphold me, for the flesh is weak"
"I'll teach you of the Flesh, my girl!"

The End

The original poem is a very dark one, apparently about vengeance for a fatal rape.  I don't mean to trivialize it, but the rhythms are so lovely, and I couldn't resist doing this parody.  You can find the original online in many places, including http://www.poetryloverspage.com/poets/kipling/heriots_ford.html.

© Copyright D. A. Landhill, 10 April 2003

Reviews

Lori    <peachesicu(at)aol(dot)com>
I wonder if Kipling would be blushing or turning in the grave to hear the little parody that turned his bit of phrase?

I enjoyed this parody.  I enjoyed the originals rhythm very much.  The author's choice of words fit the original rhythm very nicely.

It was spankingly well written.  Very interesting to this spanko.  And filled with playful spanko fun.

Haron    <haron(at)newsguy(dot)com>
What a fabulous parody!  I'm as much impressed by the author's choice of a poem to alter as with the resulting gem of spanko poetry.  The author works the rhymes and the rhythm beautifully, keeping close enough to the original, yet telling a different, compelling tale.

Ladiejj    <ladiejj(at)msn(dot)com>
A nice strong use of rhythm and meter, scans very close to the original poem.  I like the nice back and forth between the two that we see here.  The poem itself seems to be a typical punishment scene but the author skillful instead shows us that it is more than that, it is a newbie in negotiation with someone with more experience.  I do feel that trying to stay true to the original the author used a few of the same phrases, and that effected the flow of the piece as a whole.  I enjoyed how the author provided us with information on the original, it made reading the parody that much more interesting.

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