This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Edge
This story is based, with some artists licence, on an incident recorded in the newspaper, The Star, Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia, 11 May 2003.
Rough Justice
By
Valerie Meilong <meilong@excite.com>
Guamanloma in Ecuador is a quiet town some 110 km south of Quito. There are no police. The inhabitants are peace-loving and placid. But today they were enraged at Maria Elena Guanga, aged 37, and Paola Tuz, aged 27. They had swindled Meighte Cortez.
Mind you, Meighte was much to blame. It was her greed that had caused her to fall for the con. Fancy believing that she could buy a winning ticket to the lottery after it had been drawn!
"Justice must be done," thundered widower Jose-Maria. "They must be whipped. They're guilty of fraud, and goodness knows how many others they've conned."
At noon on Thursday, the trial took place in the school-yard before some 1,000 Indians from local and nearby communities. They were within their legal rights. Ecuador's judicial system allows indigenous communities that are not served by police forces to apply vigilante justice as a form of traditional law. Public humiliation and beatings are a common form of punishment in isolated Andean villages.
The verdict was unanimous. They were to be whipped like naughty children; 100 lashes.
They were dragged to the village square and Jose-Maria, self appointed judge and executioner, happily removed the clothes from the two women until they were naked as the day they were born. They were each held by two men. The watching women sneered. The watching men drooled and tried to hide their erections.
Jose-Maria sat on a small bench, and Elena, being the elder, was draped over his lap. Six stout wooden rods had been prepared and placed near him. He picked one up, waved it in the air, and then slashed it down across her naked bottom. The crowd gasped. Elena moaned.
By the fortieth stroke, Elena's bottom was covered in blood. "He's doing well," muttered the watching women, reveling in Elena's shrieks. "Serve the hussy right."
The males in the audience licked their lips, enjoying the swish of the cane that preceded each agonized cry.
At long last, came the hundredth stroke, and limply Elena was led away to be tied hanging from a tree, still naked, her arms high and her back to the awed crowd.
Then it was Paola's turn, and soon her bottom was covered in blood too. She struggled wildly, but she was held in place for the hundred lashes. She screamed louder than Elena.
Then she too was tied upright beside Elena, her shameful bottom also on display.
The village was silent that evening. Most couples went to bed early, enjoying with unusual enthusiasm their conjugal rights, mentally reliving the whipping as they did so.
Jose-Maria crept out of his bed at midnight, and silently cut down the elder woman. "Get off home," he growled. She grabbed her clothes and ran.
He turned the dangling younger girl around. She glared at him. He unfastened his belt and his trousers fell. As he went inside her, he was surprised at how little resistance there was from her. To this day he is certain she actually welcomed his attentions.
The End
© Copyright Valerie Meilong 30 July 2003
Reviews
Lori <peachesicu(at)aol(dot)com>
Some of the terms used in this story I felt didn't fit well; «They were to be whipped like naughty children;» Then in the story they were beaten bloody with a rod. Lashed was used but wooden rods did the damage. The women were referred to as hussies but the crime wasn't sexual in nature. These are a few examples of where I felt different word choices could have enhanced the story.
The harshness of the punishment makes it fit into the edge category I guess. There was for me a lack of excitement or anticipation that great edge stories have. There was no jarring shock, surprise, nail biting dread or goose bumps for me.
This is an ok story, and just because the punishment was harsh and bloody doesn't really bring me to the edge of my comfort zone. Bloody punishments just make me go icky, unless they are backed up with: excitement, anticipation, jarring shock, surprise, nail biting dread or goose bumps for me. <veg>
Sassy Jo <sassy_jolene(at)hotmail(dot)com>
The way this story is written as a news report is pretty good. As a matter of fact, I can only find ONE thing in this story that I didn't like and would remove. Last paragraph, fourth sentence, «As he went inside her, he was surprised at how little resistance there was from her.» Rape is rape is rape is rape. The story is already labeled as edge. Most rapists think that women are asking for it and appreciate it. Regardless of resistance being friction or struggle isn't important. It is more powerful that Jose-Maria believed his attentions were appreciated whether true or not.
Moving on, the originality for the story is sadly a bit low. I know in America we NEVER see news reports of this nature. (It is because we are spoiled and too delicate to hear the harsh nature of mankind.) However, the author dared to use it in a story and I admire that bravery. Well done!
Don A. Landhill <dlandhill(at)aol(dot)com>
This story was disturbing. It also wasn't really about sexual spanking, even in its more perverted forms. Also if «They were to be whipped like naughty children;» is that really how children are punished in this community? The idea of such things happening in real life is disturbing, but unfortunately true in all too many cases.
The tone of this story was so very impersonal, perhaps a bit too much so. Yet it was very powerful. I'm not sure how much the author did beyond the news reports credited, but the writing was very good. Thanks