This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Line
They Haven't Caught Up With Me Yet
By
It wasn't my fault.
And I do not think it's funny to snicker at someone when they're trying to explain themselves <glare> find it to be rather childish. And I am NOT being a snob.
Now, as I started to say, I don't think it was my fault:
"You know it's just not done asking the servants to fraternize with a member of the family. It's simply not right and it's, well, it's unseemly."
Smack, Smack, SMACK
"But, I...."
"Hmmm, yes, butt...."
Smack, Smack, SMACK
"It was patronizing of you, filling someone's head with ideas upon which that person cannot be permitted to act."
Smack, Smack, Smack, Smack
"I didn't think...."
"No, you did not think."
Smack, Smack, Smack, SMACK, SMACK
"I am your butler, Miss, not your friend nor your lover." SMACK SMACK SMACK "More's the pity. For as your friend I would be understood, and as your lover I believe I would be justified. But as your butler, I am now a man without a position, liable to charges of assault upon your person by your guardian. And THIS now should have been HIS job, I believe."
Smack, Smack, Smack, Smack, SMACK, SMACK, SMACK
"You didn't need to spank me, you know!"
"Oh, but yes, Miss, yes, I truly did!"
Smack, Smack, Smack, Smack, SMACK, SMACK, SMACK, SMACK, SMACK
I certainly do not feel what I did was out of line for the difficult situation in which I had been placed. However, discretion is the better part of valor. I vacated the manor.
They haven't caught up with me yet.
The End
© Copyright M. M., 28 July 2003
Reviews
Lori <peachesicu(at)aol(dot)com>
This story was on first read a bit confusing for me to follow, so I read it again, and one more time. Now, I get it. I liked that the help, helped himself to some hands on retribution, just not sure what the problem was specifically. The last line fit the story well, as the help took it on the lam <g>. Like I've stated a few more words might have made the story more understandable in the first read. I am glad the author liked the line so much they were move to write a story for the SSC.
Hope they'll write some more.
SirHal <janhal(at)midsouth(dot)rr(dot)com>
The last line just did not fit the story in my opinion. I also found this to be a problem: «...And THIS now should have been HIS job, I believe."» It made me stop and read it a second time. It stopped the flow of the story. It is the writers story and they can construct it as they want but I think the now should be deleted. If I follow the story correctly, HIS job would be her father. That then leaves me with the question, Who hasn't caught up with whom? Did she run away, never to return. Or did she just take a walk outside the home? Does the writer want us to believe that the father should be chasing his daughter? Why? Was it the butler that ran out? I just don't know and can not figure it out from the story. Maybe somebody else might understand it.
Jessie
I'm guessing that what begins with the quotation marks is a flashback. The lack of a clear indication of this makes the sudden introduction of quotes in a first person monologue quite confusing.
How is the person being spanked reacting to the event? She seems to remain very calm throughout the ordeal, as she continues to converse with the spanker. Some more detail about her physical reactions, or about the spanking itself, would have worked much better than a continuing litany of smack smack smack.