This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Adult
IMHO
By
What the shit!
No flow?
Nothing to say!
What the hell is wrong
with Yankee Spanko Dandy
that Spanko doodle Dandy makes better?
Not a mini saga but a poem?
OK that's it!
Calling all reviewers,
Please come into my little world, my loft.
I'd like you all to line up. Yes, each and
everyone of you. Tops and Bottoms alike.
Now, listen up I'm only going to say this once.
We need more authors so we have to give, would be
Authors who might enter this SSC contest, an incentive and not scare them off.
I think what I am suggesting would benefit everyone greatly so, off go all
bottom coverings.
And I'm going over each and everyone of your laps for a bare ass spanking.
Now, I think everyone that enters this SSC deserves this same treatment
Now, that should get us some new authors.
In addition, take the edge off my attitude.
The End
© Copyright Peachesicu, 09 July 2003
Reviews
SirHal <janhal(at)midsouth(dot)rr(dot)com>
Just as I opened my email box this morning this delightful poem was begging for me to open it. It but a smile of my face and got my day started on a good foot. Let me say "Thanks" at this time. I read this more as a rap then a poem but regardless, it was fun. At my age, I have no idea what the difference is between a poem and a rap but there does seem to be a difference. I kept looking for the music score that went with this but could not find it. Hummm now who is going to sing this and post it as an MP3 file? Trust me, I will be watching for it. I hope that this does get new and fresh writers going. We need more of this posted.
PLEASE, keep up the good work. OUCH but don't spank this old top too hard.
Kessily
I'm of two minds about this entry. I really enjoyed the spirit of it and I definitely agree with what the author was trying to get across. Bravo for the wonderful sentiment!
However, as prose it leaves much to be desired I'm afraid. I feel very funny about having to critique this particular post, because it's obvious to me that the post was made, partly, in protest about some of the harsh reviews that have been given.
And while I totally agree that some people have, at times, been way too harsh...I feel obligated to be critical of this piece.
The feelings are in the right place, but the words are stilted and seem forced. to quote the author, there is no No flow to the piece. The format seems to make you want to read it like a poem or a lyrical piece but when said that way it sounds jumbled.
However, this part I heartily agree with «We need more authors so we have to give, would be / Authors who might enter this SSC contest, an incentive and not scare them off.»
(Hoping this doesn't scare off any potential entrants.)
Ted < quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
This bizarre entry belongs in a category of its own -- demented rantings.