This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Parody with apologies to the ghost of Lord Byron. She walks in beauty, like the night may be found at http://www.bartleby.com/106/173.html and other places.
She Shakes Her Booty
By
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She shakes her booty, what a sight!
One smack the more, one stroke the less,
And on those cheeks once white as snow
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The End
© Copyright Sem, 06 July 2003
Reviews
Ladiejj <ladiejj(at)msn(dot)com>
The Author has done a great job making this a Parody. The meter of the original and his match up well. The meter he uses here is excellent and consistent through out. The rhyming scheme also works and allows the words to flow. The imagery in this poem are evocative, the set forth some nice images for the reader. The events flow and it lends to several readings to catch all the subtleties. I also enjoy how this poem is from the spanker's perspective. I think that this poem conveys the beauty and art of a spanking, and a spanked woman. I think that the first line is the only thing out of place here and that is only because the rest of the poem flows with more archaic and flowery language and the first line is a little more modern. A great read.
Jessie
Very nicely done! Excellent counterpoint to the original poem. And the language is absolutely tantalizing. This surpasses the parody category by a mile.
Trisha Allen <trishaallen(at)mindspring(dot)com>
This didn't catch my interest, as well as most entries. It seemed the flow of the verse kept slowing me down, rather than flow smoothly, as it should have.