This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Parody
Note: The parodied characters are not named until the last line which follows the spoiler space.
Psychiatric Treatment
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
He was relieved as soon as he saw that the psychiatric office was open and that the doctor was in. He double checked that he had the fee ready as his insurance did not cover these services.
"Hello, Doctor. I have a problem."
"You always have problems." The doctor noticed that he deposited the fee in the slot as required. Although necessary to get the fee it was best to keep it low keyed. "Tell me about it."
And he did. In short his parents had threatened, er, promised that he would be grounded if he forgot to do his chores – especially taking out the garbage – again.
The doctor nodded (as all psychiatrists do) and asked: "And just how do you feel about this?"
He hemmed and hawed before admitting he did not like it but they had a valid point. The doctor was good at obtaining confessions, er, admissions like this. The last forgetting was just this morning for not putting his dirty clothes in the laundry room and just last evening for not taking out the garbage.
"I KNOW exactly what you need. You came just in the nick of time." The doctor stepped from behind her desk and took hold of the patient and resumed her seat. Without any further ado, she yanked his shorts and briefs down below his knees and pulled him over her lap. "You need a good spanking, young man, so that you will remember to do your chores." With that, she began to spank her patient hard and lecturing him nonstop. In just a few minutes he was, like all little boys being properly spanked, crying and promising as his bottom turned bright red.
When she felt that the treatment was sufficient, she stopped, stood him up, pulled up his shorts and gave him some tissues.
A bit of spoiler space before I name the famous characters.
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As Charlie Brown left Doctor Lucy watched for the next patient.
The End
© Copyright A.I.L., 06 July 2003
The image that inspired this can be found at: http://www.toonopedia.com/peanuts.htm
Reviews
Ted <quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
This parody is clever and sweet, but it suffers, I think, from some awkwardness. Namely, the phrase without...further ado should be banned from all fiction, even silly fiction. The other problem I have is that the author steps out of the story to speak to the audience warning about a spoiler and interjecting a countdown. No, only someone else can spoil. The author's job is to get from beginning to end, using literary skill to punch the ending.
However, the story IS cute and commendable.
Don A. Landhill <dlandhill(at)aol(dot)com>
This was a nice little story, and I could certainly visualize the final image. The overall idea was a cute one. But the times that Lucy played Doctor I don't recall her being as sincerly helpful or as practical as she was in this version. Also, I didn't like the explicit spoiler space – It reminds me too much of those mysteries that have a break and say "Now you have all the clues that Detective So&So needed, can YOU solve the mystery? Try before you turn the page." I think it is an unneeded artificial intrusion of the author into the story. Sometimes that can work well, but not in this case, IMO.
Pablo <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
Fun. It's a gag, really, rather than a story, but a great gag. CB and Lucy are ripe for perverting in this way – has there ever been a better example of sadism and masochism in pop culture than Lucy's continual pulling away of the football, and CB's willingness to be fooled again and again?
The story provides enough clues to work out the identities of the participants (the doctor was in), but doesn't overdo it. I might whine slightly that there was potentially more room to explore the relationship, and bring in even more of the Peanuts world. It's somewhat two-dimensional, but then so is even the funniest strip-cartoon, which is essentially what's going on here. I'd love to see more of CB and Lucy's more perverted relationship. Not sure if CB is a switch, but Lucy definitely has it coming to her.