This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Verse
A sestina is an old verse form consisting of six sestets -- six line stanzas -- followed by one triplet. The words that end the lines of the first sestet are reused in each subsequent sestet, in a fixed pattern. For more on this form, see:
http://www.uni.edu/~gotera/CraftOfPoetry/sestina.html
http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Villa/8287/sestina.htm
http://www.english.upenn.edu/files/Authors/af/wwwilreis/88/sestina.html.
Comeuppance: A Spanking Sestina
By
Don A. Landhill <DLandhill@aol.com>
She stormed in through the door, and let it slam
"My dear, I will not have you acting like a child
Trying to drown my voice, to hear me not. The more she yelled
So she was silent. I said, "I will not ever tolerate such faults,
I had to let her know that I alone would now and always run
Her bottom red and burning, she winced each time the strap did fall
I punished for defiance and for faults, for tantrums like those of a naughty child
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The End
© Copyright D. A. Landhill, 04 July 2003
Reviews
Huh Chuh <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
Great job exploring poetry! I enjoyed the description of the spankee's emotions. I wondered about your usage of the word «faults» and considered earthquakes as I read about her tantrum. My mind wanted to compare her behavior, rather her misbehavior, to an earthquake stemming from her many faults. As such, I wonder how she'd ever close those gaps that cause earthquakes within and around her. Perhaps her faults, her gaps, are an integral part of her, and without them, he'd cease to be herself?
Thank you for this thought provoking sestina.
Sassy Jo <sassy_jolene(at)hotmail(dot)com>
I like this sestina. First of all, it follows its poetry rules, a definite plus. But I like that it told its story from beginning to end as well. And the fact that it was from the spanker's point of view rather than the spankee's point of view was nice too. The ending wasn't as strong as the beginning...but it was done very eloquently as a whole.
Trisha Allen <trishaallen(at)mindspring(dot)com>
I was not familiar with sestinas; however, I studied about them, using the links included. It appears to be well written. It tells a complete story, while the author imposed the stipulations specified.