CarliTales - The Camping Trip

[ Mf(13), cons, rom, oral, lolita ]

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Published: 18-Jul-2013

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Friday - After School

The gallery above the gym smelled faintly of sweat, and the windows looking down on the floor were streaked with 100 fingerprints. There weren't very many others there with me ... no special event was going on, so only a few parents there to watch their kids' final class, and pick them up for the weekend. I spotted you on the floor as soon as I came in.

The class was winding down when I arrived, and the whole class was around the walls, stretching out after class. I saw you across from the viewing box, sitting on the floor with your legs spread into a wide V, stretching out your hamstrings. You saw me watching, and your smile beamed across the gym to me.

You gave me a playful look, pulling your legs a little wider as I strained to see the tight green material of your gym sorts stretched over your cute little crotch. I shifted a little, hoping my growing erection wasn't noticeable to the others around me, but I couldn't take my eyes off your gorgeous body.

The sports bra you wore under your green and gold school shirt pressed your boobs flatter than usual, but they still looked amazing through the tight shirt. Now that you'd seen me, I could see you making an effort to show off for me. No matter what stretch you were doing, your ass or crotch was aimed directly at me. I could barely contain my excitement, and I wondered if the parents could sense my lust for you.

I was sure, even from across the gym, that I could see a small wet patch growing between your legs as the bell rang to end the class. I watched you jog out of the gym to the change room, glancing up and grinning at me as you jogged past. I filed out of the viewing gallery with the rest of the spectators, and made my way to the school parking lot to wait for you.

I knew you'd be a few minutes yet. You had to shower, of course, and change clothes after gym class. I settled into my car to wait for you, starting it up and turning the radio on. It was a gorgeous summer afternoon, and as I lazily watched the kids slowly start to spill out of school for the weekend, I drifted off into a daydream.

You stood, alone, in an empty school locker room, leaning back against a row of lockers. Your body glistens with moisture, and your green and gold gym outfit has dark patched of sweat. You slowly strip your shirt off, letting your hands linger slowly over your white sports bra, before pulling the shirt up over your head. Your pretty blond hair fell back down loosely over your shoulders and chest, and you giggled as you fixed your glasses, askew from the shirt.

Tossing the shirt in a locker, you take a few seconds to massage your young, growing tits. Every day they seemed a little bigger, and a little more sensitive, and you loved playing with them. You pulled the elastic bra up over your head, letting your sexy little boobs fall free. I watched a tiny drop of sweat run lazily down between your breasts as your hair went up again, and again tangled loosely around your now naked boobs.

One hand strayed down between your legs, quickly rubbing yourself through your gym shorts. Your head leaned back against the lockers, your mouth opening wide as your fingers pressed down on your hard little clit. You hooked your thumbs into the waist band, and quickly stripped off your shorts and panties in one motion.

Tossing your shorts in the locker, you removed your glasses, folding them gently and putting them on the top shelf before grabbing your soap and towel and wandering off toward the showers. Being alone in the group shower room, you went to a corner, turning three nozzles on and directing them all toward you. You stood under the water, facing the stream, letting the water run down your hair and body.

It only took a few seconds for your hands to find your tits again. You gently massaged your boobs as the water beaded down on them, paying special attention to the puffed circle around your nipples. You squeezed a long stream of white soft soap between your boobs, before lathering yourself up.

You meticulously washed your whole body, starting from the top, and working your way down. I loved watching your fingers work the soapy suds around your lithe young body, and as you washed your little pussy, you took extra time to rub and play. Leaning back against the wall of the shower, your fingers squeezed and rubbed your clit as the water rinsed your soap off.

Your body trembled, your fingers buried deeply in your young sex. Biting your lower lip, you stifled a scream as the orgasm washed over your little body.

"Daydream much?" I nearly bounced off the roof of the car, as you opened the door, looking inside. Giggling, you slid into the passenger seat, glancing down at my crotch. "And just what have you been dreaming about, sir?" with feigned surprise. As I regained my composure and started backing the car out, you rubbed your hand across my crotch, squeezing my shaft through my jeans. "Such a dirty old man," you grinned, stroking me through the denim. "Watching my grade 8 class stretching, with such a hard cock. Were you thinking nasty things?"

"You know it Carli," I said, turning the car into traffic and heading out of town. I loved what you'd changed into, a short green plaid skirt with a white button up blouse. Your hair was still wet from your shower after gym class, matted a bit in long thin strands down your back and across your chest. "You looked very hot. How was school this week?"

You relaxed back into your seat, reclining the back halfway, knowing it was going to be a long trip. Your sexy legs stretched out from under the green skirt, with white knee socks and black flat soled sandals. You stretched, yawning a bit, shifting your body around in the seat and riding your skirt up. I watched your mouth stretch wide into a bigger yawn, imagining my cock sliding in before you closed.

"It was good," you said with a tired, smile, closing your eyes and relaxing in the seat. Your skirt was up almost high enough for me to see your crotch, and your stretches left your legs parted seductively. "Tiring. I had 4 tests this week." Your hand unconsciously slid down your tummy and over your skirt, sliding down to your crotch. I loved how comfortable you were with me now, playing with yourself without even thinking about it, whenever you felt the need.

You pulled up your skirt, more to give yourself better access than to give me a better view. I adjusted the mirror to get a better look, loving the way you rubbed your pretty little clit. "I'm pretty sure I aced the math test Wednesday," you continued, moaning quietly as you told me about your week. "But Social and French really sucked." You groaned as you slide two fingers slowly between you tight lips. "I left my panties off just for you," you purred. "I hope you like it."

"I love it Carli," I said hoarsely, alternating between the road and my rear-view mirror. I loved to watch you finger-fuck yourself, and you knew how hot I got watching your slim fingers slide between your almost hairless pussy lips. I glanced over to get a live look as you pulled your skirt right up over your shirt, exposing your lower self completely to me. I marveled at your young pussy, as you pulled your fingers out and used your hands to spread yourself open. The thin trail of hair leading up from your clit was darker than the rest of your hair, parting to each side, widening as it moved away from your cunt.

You sighed contentedly as your fingers slid back inside your tight little cunt. You were really off in your own little world now, not interested in talking about school anymore. I watched your pretty fingers disappear into your fuck hole for a few more seconds before I reached over and clicked open the glove box. "Look inside," I said.

You sat up, not willing to remove your fingers from your pussy just yet. You pulled out a small box with your free hand, awkwardly opening it one handed as your other hand still fucked your little cunt. You looked a bit confused when you pulled out a small silver egg, with a cord attached, and a control box. You flicked the switch, your eyes going wide as the little metal egg jumped to life in your hands, vibrating faster and harder than anything you'd felt before.

"Oh my God," you giggled, touching the egg quickly against your nipple through your shirt. "Wow." You stared at it for a second, watching it vibrate before putting it between your legs. I'd never heard such a sound come out of your mouth before, but when you touched the egg to your clit, you let you a low, guttural scream that got louder and louder the harder you pushed.

It only took a few seconds for your body to start shaking violently in the seat, your orgasm crashing hard over you. You arched your back high as the waves swept over you, still holding the egg to your clit, now high in the air. I was glad we were on the highway now as your 13 year old pussy would have been easily visible if we'd been in the busy traffic of the city. It took a full minute for your shaking to subside, and your body to slump back to the seat in exhaustion.

"That ... was ... amazing," you panted, smiling weakly while you tried to catch your breath. I could tell the orgasm had been very intense for you ... your body was hanging loose on the seat like a rag doll, and your cheek rested leisurely against the plush seat back. "I'm ... that ... ummm." You could barely think as the waves of pleasure were replaced with waves of exhaustion. "Wow" was the last thing you said before you fell asleep in the seat beside me.

I knew you'd had a long week, and spent a couple nights up late talking to me online, so I was happy to let you sleep. It was a long, 4 hour drive to the camp site, and you slept soundly the whole way. I was a little nervous when I stopped to use the bathroom, but you looked so cute and peaceful sleeping there with your fingers on your pussy and the egg dangling loosely between your legs, I couldn't bear to wake you. I parked in a secluded area, locked all the doors, and hurried back.

You were still asleep when we got to the campgrounds, and I left you there while I set up the tent. It wasn't very crowded so far, and if luck held, we'd have our own little corner of the campground. I spent about half an hour setting up our blue and grey 4-man tent, as well as the food coolers, and lanterns and chairs.

Coming back to the car, I opened the passenger door, gazing down at your gorgeous, sleeping body. Your glasses were pushed a little crooked as your cheek lay on the seat, and your fingers still lingered at your clit. I knelt down, putting one arm under your knees, and the other around your shoulders, lifting you gently from the car seat. You moaned quietly and smiled a bit as I lifted you, but you didn't wake up, instead burying your face in my chest as you slept.

I ducked into the tent, and gently laid you down on you air mattress. I'd spread out your favorite Tweety Bird quilt, and you seemed to recognize the feel against your body even in your sleep. You snuggled into it as I set you down and covered you up, leaving the tent with a quick kiss on your pretty cheek.

I spent some time lighting a fire, and getting our steaks ready to cook. I filled up a small cooler with ice, dropping the bottle of champagne I brought to chill for later, and sat down to enjoy the fire while you slept.

The sun was going down by the time you woke up, coming groggily out of the tent. "How long did I sleep," you asked sleepily, rubbing your eyes. At some point, you'd changed out of your school clothes, and into your pink flannel night dress, hanging loosely to your knees. The loose hang of the night dress almost completely obscured your boobs, making you look even younger than you were.

"A few hours baby," I said lovingly, stretching out my arms to you. You smiled sleepily, plopping yourself down on my lap and wrapping your arms around my neck. You snuggled into my neck, sighing contentedly as our bodies met and melted together. I wrapped my arms around your body as you sat across my lap, gently kissing my neck. "I've been waiting for this time alone for you lover," I whispered, wiping some hair from your cheek.

"Mmmm, me too," you sighed, wiggling your ass a bit on my lap, feeling my cock through my pants. "I neglected you today," you pouted as my cock grew under your ass.

"Not at all baby," I said, my hands finding your tits through the night dress, reaffirming to myself that you were 13. "I loved watching you play with your pussy, and I loved watching you sleep." I loved the feeling of your soft lips on my neck, and your nipples were getting hard under my touch. "I hope you're still not wearing panties," I said as my hand slid the blue-fringed hem up over your smooth, soft thighs.

"Never for you," you purred, letting your outside leg naturally drop down, opening your pussy up to my touch. You moaned as my fingers touched your wet little hole, marveling as always at your wetness.

"I love how wet you are baby," I moaned, running my thick finger up and down your slick slit.

"I'm always wet now," you whispered into my neck, nibbling on me, and sucking in your breath sharply as my fingers spread your pussy lips open. "I wake up wet, I'm wet all day at school, and I'm wet when I go to bed," You grunted deeply as I slid two fingers inside your fuck hole, squeezing me hard with your pussy muscles. "I'm always thinking about your fingers, or tongue."

Your body was melting into mine, and now your legs were spread wide as you ground against my fingers. Fortunately, it was still really early in the camping season, and the campground was almost empty, so no one was around to hear your moans as my fingers fucked you.

Your nap rejuvenated you, and I could feel the energy in your body growing. You were grinding yourself hard against my fingers now, trying to push my fingertips all the way to your cervix. Your cunt gripped me hard, trying to pull me in deeper as well. You looked amazing writhing around on my lap in the firelight.

With a loud groan, your pussy contracted around me, holding my fingers inside you. You put your hand on mine, pushing me in as your body shook with cum on my lap. When you finally stopped shaking, you panted lustily against my neck, your hair tangled loosely over your face.

"I have steaks ready for the grill," I said as you slumped against me. I couldn't see your smile, but I could feel it radiating out of your body. "Are you hungry?"

"You're so good to me," you purred, kissing my neck, then my cheek. "I am hungry," you giggled, sliding off my lap onto your knees. "But right now, the only meat I want is in your pants." You ran your hands over my jeans, one hand quickly finding my fly and sliding the zipper down. With an expert motion, you pulled my hard cock out of my jeans, immediately lowering your lips to the head.

I groaned as your lips gently parted around my swollen cock, sliding the whole head and shaft deep into your mouth. What I loved about your blow-jobs was never knowing what to expect, and tonight, you wanted my cock head buried in the back of your throat. I loved the feel of your throat, and the few months we'd been together had given you a lot of control over your gag reflex.

You didn't even need to use your hand anymore to block my cock from going too deep. As you slid your lips down my shaft, swallowing more and more of me, I was amazed to see my pubic hair tickling your nose. "That's amazing Carli," I groaned, watching in the firelight as your lips strained around the base of your shaft.

I could feel you fighting your gag reflex as you pushed me into your throat, and the muscle contractions felt like a million tiny fingers stroking my dick. You felt my shaft swell in your mouth, and you knew I was close to cumming. I tried to pull back, but you held your mouth deep on my shaft, still using your gag to milk my cock.

With a deep grunt, I grabbed your hair, holding your face on my cock as I shot my load into your throat. You moaned and thrashed beneath me as my hot juice shot into your throat, unable to get enough of my cream.

Finally, I pulled my cock out of your mouth, dribbling a final bit of cum into your hair. "That was amazing," you panted, still catching your breath after my mouth fucking. "I couldn't really taste your cum, but I could feel it sliding down my throat." You stroked your throat absently, tilting your head back. "Yummy,"

You got up, leaving me in the chair recovering from my orgasm. You went to the picnic table, grabbing the steaks, and throwing them on the grill on the fire. "Let me cook the steaks," you said with a smile. "You relax."

We enjoyed the steaks, with mushrooms, and baked potatoes from the fire as night descended. The only light around was coming from our campfire, and you looked angelic in the orange, flickering light. I watched you flitting about the campsite tidying up from dinner, mesmerized by your sexy little ass under your loose night shirt. When you finished, you came back over to me, plopping yourself on my lap again, giving me a long, seductive kiss on the cheek.

I turned my lips to yours, kissing you gently at first, then with more and more force as our passions rekindled. We attacked each other's lips, exploring each other's mouths with our tongues as my hands found your chest. I loved the feel of your growing boobs through the thin flannel, and you loved the way I played with them.

You stood up, pulling me out of my chair by the hand. "Take me to bed," you said, smiling sweetly at me and batting your gorgeous green eyes. I put the fire out, stirring the wet embers, then followed you into the tent. You ducked your head to get through the door, and I playfully smacked your ass as you did.

Losing your balance, you started giggling, twisting in the air as you fell onto your Tweety quilt. Your night dress flew up, revealing your delicious naked pussy as you fell back onto the blanket on your side. You lay on the quilt giggling, with your legs spread a bit and your cunt on display for me.

"Now that's a pretty little cunt." I said quietly as you looked up at me giggling. Your giggles turned to moans as I lowered my head between your slender legs, flicking my tongue out for a taste of your sweet juice. You jumped a bit when my tongue flicked across your hard little clit.

You grabbed my head with your hands, pulling me into your snatch. You groaned loudly as my tongue danced excitedly across your pussy lips, then forced itself inside you. "I love the way you lick me Steve," you moaned, your fingers pressing against my scalp as I licked.

My cock was a solid rod again, bouncing against the warm quilt as I licked your little cunt. I loved the taste of your juices, but I knew I couldn't resist shoving my cock inside you for long. After a few final licks, I slid my body up yours, positioning my cock in front of your young pussy.

"Fuck me," you moaned, wrapping your arms around my neck and pulling me close to you. I slid my cock between your naturally lubed cunt lips. As always, you were tight like a vice, but eagerly sucked my shaft inside you. You groaned loudly feeling my hot length filling you up, and I felt you dig your fingernails into my back a little bit.

I loved the way you looked with my cock inside you. Your usual innocent smile was transformed into a half-smile, half grimace, as your pretty green eyes gazed up lustily at me. In this position, me on top of you, our eyes were almost always locked together as I fucked you, and I loved seeing the need and lust in your eyes.

We fucked each other for several minutes, alternating slow and gentle with quick, savage thrusts. My stomach and groin pressed hard against your clit with each stroke, as your young pussy gripped my shaft, pulling me deeper inside you. With each stroke, your cunt gripped me tighter, desperately trying to squeeze my cum out.

It didn't take long. Gazing deeply into my eyes, I felt your pussy contract to impossible tightness as you screamed, rolling your eyes back in your head. You struggled to focus on me as the waves of pleasure rolled across your body, and the contractions of your velvet cunt finally pulled the hot white cream from my shaft.

Grunting and moaning together, we thrashed on the Tweety quilt as our orgasms subsided. We both collapsed together, wrapped in each other's arms, exhaustion overtaking us quickly now. "I love you Carli," I said quietly, as I felt sleep creeping up on me quickly. "Sweet Dreams baby." My voice trailed off as I fell asleep, my softening cock still inside you.

Friday Night - Late Night at the Playground

The night was dark and clear, a half moon shining brightly down on the campground. I'd woken up in the middle of the night needing to pee, and the campground was silent at 3:30AM. When I made my way back to the tent, I was surprised to hear you moving around inside.

I ducked inside the tent, smiling at you. "Sorry, I didn't mean to wake you up. I just had to pee." You were putting on your shoes, and I loved watching you sitting with your knees up in your night dress as you tied your sneakers.

"Let's go play in the park," you said, with a playful grin.

"It's 3AM," I said, chuckling a bit.

"I know," you continued, ducking out of the tent. "But it'll be empty," you whispered back to me as the tent flap swung shut. I followed you out of the tent, and across to the playground in the center of the campground. You ran in front of me, hopping on the swings as soon as we got there.

I watched as you pumped the swing as hard as you could, going higher and higher. With each swing, your nightie blew up giving me a great view of your naked pussy swinging by. After a few minutes, you let the swing slow down, jumping off with your dress billowing around you.

Giggling quietly, you ran over to the monkey bars, first going across them on your arms, then coming back to the middle to hang by your knees. Your night dress fell towards the ground, leaving your naked body exposed on the bars. I stepped close, flicking my tongue out to lick your clit lightly. I felt your hands rubbing around my crotch, and you quickly unzipped my fly, releasing my hard cock.

I felt your lips slide around the head of my cock as you hung upside down. I sunk my tongue into your tight little pussy, loving the taste of your juices. With you hanging upside down, we licked and sucked each other for a few minutes before you had to swing down.

"Let's try the slide," I said, smacking your cute little ass as you skipped over to the slide. I straddled the metal chute as you climbed the stairs, giggling quietly as you spread your legs for me at the top, getting ready to slide down. As you slid under me, I grabbed you around the waist, stopping you on the slide with your mouth just in front of my cock.

You happily swallowed me down as I held you, welcoming any chance to get my cock in your mouth. I loved the feel of your talented young tongue as you worked your mouth on my hard shaft. Using your hand, you stroked the base of my rod, as your mouth pleasured the head.

I lifted you back up, shuffling up the slide until my cock was level with your delicious pussy. You spread your legs as wide as you could for me, your thighs now up over the edge of the slide chute. I slowly let gravity pull you down a bit, sliding you onto my hard cock. You bit your lip, stifling a moan as your cunt swallowed my dick.

I leaned over, kissing you deeply as started fucking each other. Using your hands on the sides of the slide, you slide yourself up and down as I thrust myself into you. Your tight little cunt gripped me like a thousand tiny fingers, squeezing my cock and pulling me in. I buried my mouth in yours to try and stifle my own moans as I fucked your tight little hole.

It didn't take either of us long. You sucked my tongue deeply into your mouth, using it as a gag to stifle your scream as I felt you contract around me, your body shaking violently in orgasm. Your orgasm around my cock set me off as well, and as we both used each other's mouths to stifle out passionate noises, I shot my hot cum deep into your tight little hole.

Giggling quietly, we quickly made our way back to the tent, ducking inside, and curling up next to each other on your Tweety blanket. My hand gently rubbed your pussy, loving the feel of my juices draining out onto your leg as we both quickly fell asleep again.

Saturday - Climbing Rocks

I slept very soundly through the night, with you snuggled against me. I woke up slowly, groggy, as the sun came in through the tent. It took me a few seconds to realize the strange feeling I had was your pretty little mouth on my morning hard-on. I rubbed the sleep out of my eyes, putting on my glasses to see you better.

"Good morning my pretty little slut," I said, smiling down at you. "I can't think of a better way to wake up than in your mouth Carli." I reached down, running my fingers through your soft hair. I used my fingers to help brush some of the tangles out as I guided your head up and down on my cock.

It was a glorious feeling, your hot young mouth pleasuring me. At some point, you'd turned around on the mattress, laying with your head by my cock and your pussy by my head. You were on your side, your top leg bent at the knee, inviting me to play with your naked, dripping cunt.

I tilted my head forward the few inches required, and flicked my tongue out to taste your sweet young nectar. "Best breakfast in the world," I groaned, sinking my tongue deep into your tight crack. You moaned, gripping my cock tightly with your hand as you pulled your mouth off my hard cock.

"I agree," you said, nuzzling my shaft against your soft cheek. I lifted up my leg as your hand cupped my balls, gently massaging them while you kissed my shaft. Your position was amazing for me, giving me a perfect view of your young cunt stretched out in front of me, and your tight little asshole puckering at me like a kiss. I sucked your clit between my lips, making you groan with pleasure as you continued to rub your cheek against my cock. I loved the feel of your thin, short pubic hair around your clit as my tongue made you squirm.

You swallowed the head of my cock, lovingly licking all over the top and sides. Your hand worked my shaft like piston, rhythmically stroking me I slid my index finger quickly between your smooth pussy lips. As usual, you were soaking wet, and my finger slid easily inside you despite your tightness. I fucked your tight little pussy for a few seconds as I enjoyed your attention on my cock, but I had other plans ultimately.

I pulled my finger out, using it to rub some of your pussy juice down onto your ass, rubbing my fingertip around your tight back hole. My second and third fingers slid into your pussy to replace the first one, as my index finger continued to play with your loosening asshole. After a few thrusts of two fingers into your cunt, I slowly eased my index finger into your ass.

You moaned loudly as I felt all your muscles contract and squeeze me. You froze on my cock, holding still as you pushed your ass onto my finger. You held your breath for several seconds, pushing me deeper and deeper into you. My other two fingers were working your pussy as I moved them from side to side inside you.

Slowly, I started to fuck your pussy and ass with my fingers, as you resumed working on my hard cock. Your tight little ass gripped my single finger, but your pussy juice let me slide in and out, slowly at first as you gyrated your crotch into me. You moaned and groaned as I filled all three of your holes at once.

It took only a few short minutes for your body to start shaking under me, your orgasm spreading out. You screamed into my cock as your cunt and ass squeezed my fingers like vices. Your screams and the contractions of your mouth sent me over the edge as well, and I started shooting my hot, salty cum into your teen mouth.

It took a few seconds for our cum to stop, and our bodies to relax again. You released my prick from your mouth grip, as some of my cum ran down your chin, dripping onto the chest of your flannel nightie. You swallowed the rest, looking up at me with a happy smile.

"I need to pee," I said, feeling around the tent for my jeans. I found them and pulled them up over my ankles and legs. I pulled on my shirt as you ducked out of the tent, still wearing your cum coated night dress.

"Me too," you said, as I emerged from the tent, and we both walked across the campground to the bathrooms. The campground was still pretty empty ... only a few other spots had campers set up in them, and most people were setting up their breakfast. We walked to the bathrooms arm in arm, your head resting sweetly against my chest. We got a few odd looks from a few of the campers, but we just ignored them.

Breakfast was quick and easy. After building a fire, we cooked some bacon and eggs quickly, while planning out our day. There were a few reasons we'd picked this particular campground ... it was set on the shores of a large, clear lake, perfect for swimming, and near some excellent rock climbing trails. We decided to go climbing today, then hit the lake tomorrow before we drove home.

It only took a few minutes to pack up for the day. After securing our food and stuff in the car trunk, you packed up some sandwiches and veggies for lunch, and some granola to munch on the way while I threw some shorts on inside the tent.

"I'll change on the way, in the car," you said as I emerged from the tent, sliding into the passenger seat, ready to head out. The paths were about 5 miles away, but on the back roads, it took us nearly 20 minutes by car to get there. Along the way, I watched as you stripped off your flannel nightie, sliding on one of your school shirts, and a pair of loose green shorts. I loved that you rarely even thought about wearing panties when you were with me these days, and I hoped I'd get some action from your pretty, naked pussy later in the day.

We grabbed our packs and started walking. The path initially was pretty easy, wide and flat with only a gentle slope. We walked, hand in hand, for most of the morning, talking and checking out the sights and wildlife. We were lucky enough to see several elk while we walked, and of course no shortage of birds and small animals. It was a perfect day for hiking, not too warm, but clear and sunny, with very little wind.

As it got closer to lunch, the paths were getting steeper. With the way the path system was set up, we weren't that far from the car, even now, having criss-crossed across the mountain to get this far. We found a nice little spot just off the trails and stopped for a bit of a break and lunch.

We spread out a blanket and pulled out the sandwiches. It had been a pretty quiet day on the trails, with very few other people around. Earlier in the morning we'd passed another couple, but otherwise, our only company had been the animals. I laid down on the blanket on my side, while you sat cross-legged across from me.

We ate our lunch, enjoying the wonderful weather, chatting about your week at school, and my week at work. When we finished our sandwiches, we decided that since we weren't trying to get anywhere today, we'd just laze around here for a bit and enjoy the day.

You slid across the blanket, snuggling up against me as I put my arm around you. I loved the feeling of your teen body pushed against mine, so young and full of energy. You always seemed to melt into me when we touched, and I loved the consent your body gave me with every sigh and shiver.

We lay there for ages, sometimes talking about nothing, sometimes silent. I rubbed your shoulders, and stroked your hair, just loving the closeness of you against my body. I could feel your chest rising and falling as you breathed. I sighed contentedly, kissing you on the head.

You rolled onto your back, gazing up at me. You put your arms up, around my neck, pulling me down to your lips. "We just gonna lay here, or you gonna fuck me," you asked as my lips brushed yours. You locked your lips against mine kissing me deeply as you rubbed your hand against my crotch.

You slid down the blanket, your hands quickly undoing my pants and pulling my cock out. Your sweet little hands always made me stand at attention, and today was no different. You stared for a bit as you stroked me, before sliding my shaft into your mouth.

I rolled onto my back, you straddling my legs on all fours as you worked your mouth up and down on my stiff rod. You took your hand away, pushing your lips almost all the way to the base of my shaft. I groaned, grabbing your head and holding you on my cock. I slowly pulled you back, keeping only the top few inches of my cock between your lips. You relaxed, trusting me to guide your head. I held you there for a few seconds, marveling at the beautiful sight.

"You look amazing with my cock in your mouth Carli," I moaned, holding your head tight as I slowly pushed my shaft up into your mouth. I held it almost all the way in for a few seconds, before pulling back again, and starting to slowly fuck your pretty mouth. "You look so pretty getting face fucked."

You groaned, loving the feel of me using your mouth, and loving my dirty talk. "You want me to fuck your tight little cunt Carli?" I didn't pull my cock all the way out, so all you could do was grunt ascent. "Good," I said with a smile, still sliding my cock in and out of your mouth. "First, I'm going to fuck your sexy little mouth some more."

You didn't seem to mind, happy to have me hold your head for my cock. I was very proud of you for not gagging once, and I loved the way you strained to push me inside you on every thrust, Finally, I pulled your face off my cock, pulling you up toward me. You slid off your shorts, straddling my midsection as you lowered your lips to mine.

Your wet little cunt quickly found my cock, and you moaned loudly as you sank yourself onto me. "Does my 8th grade cunt feel good, old man?" you asked, dropping your lips to my neck as I began to thrust my cock up into you.

"So good baby," I moaned, with you crashing your pussy down onto my cock with every thrust. You sat up a bit, leaning on your arms and looking down at me as I reached up to grab your tits. You looked so sexy in nothing but your school shirt, bouncing on my cock, and I loved the feel of your budding boobs through the thin material.

You bounced on my cock for several minutes, your face twisted in ecstasy above me. I loved watching you ride my cock, watching your tight little tits bounce a bit as your hair flew wildly around. I met each of your thrusts with one of my own, trying to bury my cock deep inside you. I felt you cum around my cock several times, and just kept fucking you, hard, through the contractions.

When you came for the 4th time, you rolled off me, exhausted, my hard cock still sticking straight up. You panted, trying to catch your breath as I knelt above you, straddling your chest. I loved the way your tits looked under your school shirt, pulled tight across them. "Cum on me," you moaned, looking up at me as I stroked my hard cock.

"I wanna see you shoot your cum on me," you begged, as I stared down at your gorgeous eyes and stroked my cock. "Please Steve," you begged, "I want to be your teen cum slut." I loved it when you asked for my cum, and it didn't take long at all. With a loud scream, I shot a long load of cum onto your shirt on your left tit and up onto your neck. Two more loud grunts left the valley between your boobs soaking in cum, and I dribbled the rest of my load onto your stomach. I collapsed beside you as you turned your head to kiss me. We lay like that for several minutes, our lips locked together in a gentle kiss as my cum dried on your gym shirt.

Voices up the trail startled us back to reality. I've never seen you move that fast, jumping off the blanket and pulling your shorts on in one quick motion. It took me a little longer, but by the time the older couple came into view, we just looked like two hikers packing up our lunch. They smiled and waved as they walked by, and if they noticed your cum-soaked shirt, they didn't show it.

The rest of the afternoon was amazing. A little farther up the path, we'd found a nice steep climb that you wanted to try. I was pretty sure it was beyond my 43 year old body, but I happily settled myself in to watch you try. You spent a couple hours scrambling around on the steep slope, and had a great time. I had a wonderful time watching your lovely young body move and bend as you climbed.

We finally started to head back to the car around 5, and I could tell you were pretty tired. There were more direct routes back to the parking spots, and instead of the 4 hours it had taken us to get to the rock wall, we were back at the car in 30 minutes. As we drove back to the campground, I marvelled at the dried cum stains still on your shirt.

I got the fire going again, while you pulled out the food. We had burgers for tonight, and you got everything ready while I got the fire stoked for the grill. It didn't take us long, and we were eating tasty burgers beside a nice fire. You pulled your chair close to mine as we ate, as though you couldn't bear to not be touching me. The feeling was very much mutual.

When dinner was finished, I grabbed your plate to clean up, while you relaxed by the fire. You seemed mesmerized by the dancing flames, and you were happily leaning back in your chair, gazing into the fire. It didn't take me long to clean up, but the day's climbing must have taken a toll on you, because when I got back to the fire, you were fast asleep in your chair.

I smiled, looking down at you watching your chest rise and fall as you breathed. I leaned down and kissed your head gently, not wanting to wake you up. I grabbed your Tweety blanket from the tent, and threw it on top of you.

I let you sleep for an hour or so, while I wandered around the campground, checking out the other camp lots and enjoying the evening. When I returned, you were exactly where I left you, laying back in the chair, fast asleep, your head turned to the side, your mouth open slightly.

You were still wearing your cum stained shirt from this afternoon, and you looked so sexy sleeping there. I walked up to you quietly, not wanting to wake you, pulling my cock out as I did. I gently rubbed the head of my dick against your sleeping lips, and to my surprise, you moaned, and opened your mouth wider to let me in.

You still seemed to be fast asleep, but your mouth was open wide enough now for me to slide all of my head inside you. I stroked your beautiful blond hair lightly, still not wanting to wake you even as I fucked your mouth. Your lips and tongue felt amazing against my engorged prick, and even fast asleep, you gave an amazing blowjob.

I'd been gently fucking your mouth for about five minutes when you started to wake up. You were startled at first, confused about what was happening. "Don't worry baby," I whispered, gently stroking your hair. You moaned as you realized what was happening, hungrily opening your mouth even wider for me. Your hand went immediately to your cunt, rubbing yourself furiously as you sucked me hard now.

"I thought after this morning," I said with a smile, fucking your face a little harder now, "that I should return the favour."

"Mmmhmm," you groaned as you hungrily sucked my cock. I reached down, pushing your hand away, and sliding my hand inside your shorts. Your pussy was soaking wet, and I quickly shoved two fingers into your hole as my cock pushed in and out of your young mouth.

I matched the rhythm between my fingers and cock, filling your pussy and mouth at the same time. You screamed with each thrust, muffled only by my cock deep in your throat, and whimpered when I pulled myself out of your holes. It only took a few more thrusts of my cock and fingers till I felt every muscle in your body contract as you started to cum.

You grabbed onto my ass, pulling me as deep into your mouth as you could as your ground your slit into my hand. You screamed and writhed underneath of me for a full 30 seconds before your orgasm subsided. I gently grabbed you under the legs and neck, and carried you into the tent. I set you down, along with your Tweety blanket. "I'll be right back lover," I said. "Gotta put the fire out."

When I got back to the tent, I loved what I saw inside. You'd spread out your Tweety blanket, and changed into your flannel nightie. You were laying back against the side of the tent, your legs spread, and your mouth hanging seductively open. "Oh my God Carli," I groaned, staring at your pretty 13 year old pussy. "You look amazing."

I practically dove between your legs, locking my lips onto your little clit. You groaned, grabbing my head and pulling me into you. You ground your snatch into my face as I licked and sucked at your delicious juices. I could never get enough of your sweet juices and I lapped at them like a man dying of thirst laps at the first water he's seen in a week.

I knew I needed to be inside you soon. My hard cock was grinding against the floor of tent as I lay in front of you, worshiping your divine cunt. I got up on all fours, moving slowly up your body with my tongue, first tracing over your tummy and belly button, then through the valley between your tits. When my cock head finally touched your pussy, you jumped, trying to push yourself on me.

I was in no mood to tease tonight, and thrust hard into your tight hole. You screamed, grabbing me around the neck and pulling me down to you. We locked lips, in a deep passionate kiss as my cock thrust savagely in and out of you. We were both consumed with animal passion tonight, feeling nothing beyond the coupling of our bodies.

We fucked for what seemed like an hour. I rolled you over onto your hands and knees, sliding my cock into you from behind, and fucking you hard while I held your long pretty hair. I rolled you on your side, lifting your leg and sliding into your wet cunt scissor like while I squeezed your nipples. I flipped you on your back, lifting your ass in the air to slide my hard cock into you from above.

I lost track of the number of times you came, and for awhile it seemed your tight teen cunt was constantly cumming around my cock. Finally, I knew I was close. With a pillow under your ass, I had your legs around my neck as I pumped your sweet pussy as hard as I could. Your face was lost in lust, and your eyes stared hungrily into mine, silently begging for my cum.

Through the whole session, you hadn't taken off your nightie, and you looked so sexy below me in the pink and blue flannel. With a deep groan, I pulled my cock out of you and stroked it twice. My first shot of cum splattered all over your glasses and forehead, and two more quickly hit your chin and neck. I was amazed at my load ... the third one of the day was usually small, but three more shots of cum landed on the duck and penguin graphic on your nightie before I was done.

We were both exhausted and I collapsed down beside you. You snuggled next to me as I pulled the blankets over us. "mmmm" you moaned quietly as I wrapped my arm around you, kissing you gently on your cum coated forehead. "You fucked me to sleep."

Sunday - Swimming Holes

The sun shone through the tent early Sunday morning, heating up the interior as we slept. A mother sparrow near our site was feeding her chicks, and the squawking woke me from my sleep. You were snuggled against me, gently breathing, my dried cum still on your pussy and leg from our late-night playground encounter, and my stains from the previous day on your nightie, face and hair. I felt the warmth of your ass, and your rhythmic breathing against my chest was very soothing.

"I had fun," you said quietly, startling me.

"Me too," I said. "I thought you were still asleep."

"Fucking birds," you said, wiggling your sexy little ass against me. I started laughing, and you started too, as I hugged you close against me.

"Ya, they are loud this morning," I giggled. "I have to pee," I said, reaching down between your legs and rubbing my fingers between your damp pussy lips. "But I wanna play with THAT later." You moaned as I slid my fingers inside you, then back out again and got up, putting my pants on.

"No fair," you pouted, still curled up in your Tweety blanket. "You're teasing." Your face did a perfect schoolgirl pout.

"You love it, I think," I said with a smile, glancing back at you as I ducked out of the tent. I wasn't at all surprised to see you'd replaced my fingers with your own, rubbing your wet little slit. "Such a pretty cunt," I said, pausing to gaze at you on your back, legs spread, enjoying your cunt.

"I guess I need to as well," you sighed, closing your legs and taking a quick lick of your fingers. "I do have a yummy pussy though," you said with a smile, smacking my ass as you followed me out of the tent. Your night dress hung down to your knees, and the dried cum was barely noticeable from yesterday, unless you knew what to look for.

We walked arm in arm, your head resting against my chest, not really caring what anyone else thought. My hand, slid slowly down, cupping your tight little ass cheek through the flannel of your nightie, making you giggle.

Back at the camp site, you wanted to try your hand at making a fire, so I worked getting everything else ready. It didn't take you long at all, and within 5 minutes, you had a great fire going in the fire pit under the grill. I started to scramble the eggs, as we threw a fry pan with the bacon and veggies on the grill. We let that sizzle till the bacon was nearly cooked, then crumbled the bacon and added the eggs.

Within minutes we were enjoying bacon, green pepper, onion, and mushroom eggs. "Swimming at the lake today," I asked, loving the fact that you were sitting with your legs open, showing me your pussy.

"Ya," you said between bites of your eggs, "I'm really looking forward to the lake."

"It's gonna be cold," I said as I finished my breakfast. "It's only May."

"It'll make my nipples hard," you giggled, finishing your food as well.

"Why don't you go get your bathing suit on while I clean up," I asked? I grabbed your plate, stacking it on mine and giving your growing boob a quick squeeze through your nightie.

"Ok," you giggled. "You're still teasing though." You reached over, stroking my cock through my pants. "I can tease too," you said with a grin as you got up and skipped off to the tent. I watched as you went, your cute little ass bouncing under the flannel.

I'd never seen this bathing suit before, and I nearly came in my pants when you came back out of the tent. The thong bottom just had a thin string parting your ass cheeks, and the triangle of material barely covered your pussy and pubic hair. The top was a little bigger than the bottoms, but the cups of the bikini top still didn't cover your entire tits. I loved the way your puffy nipples poked out the material as it spread tightly across you.

"You look really sexy Carli," I said, coming up behind you and grabbing your naked ass cheek.

"Let's go swimming," you said with a smile, not doing anything to get my hand off your ass. The lake was closer than the hiking paths were, so we decided to walk. After packing a bag each, and securing the rest of our stuff, we wandered off the beach, about a 5 minute walk. Along the way we teased each other, and at one point, I licked my pinky, pulled the string aside, and slid it inside your tight asshole as we walked.

When we got to the public beach, we looked up and down the lake shore. The sand got rougher, with more driftwood and over growth in other areas, but it all looked pretty passable, so we walked up the beach to find a more secluded spot. We found a nice spot about half a mile up the beach, and while I started to set our stuff up, you dropped your bag and ran off into the lake.

I chuckled as you shrieked, feeling the chilly water hit your legs, but it didn't take long for you to get used to it, and soon you were splashing and swimming like the local pool. Feeling a bit lazy, I decided to lay on the beach and watch you splash around in the lake in front of me.

I loved the way you looked wet, in all ways. After the first time you dove under water, you came up with your blond hair a little darker matted against your chest and back. Tiny streams of water ran down your smooth young gorgeous skin as it drained back into the lake, and I could tell you were showing off to me a bit, as I watched you dive down and come up again several times in row.

It didn't take long for you to get more serious though. I knew you were working on your back stroke, and I loved watching you go back and forth in front of me, your 13 year old boobs and tummy floating above the water. Not only did you look sexy and stunning, but your form was getting very good as well.

After about 45 minutes of watching you swim, I decided to wade out and join you. I was as unprepared as you for how cold the water was at first, and you laughed at me when I shrieked like you. I waded out to meet you as you stood in shoulder deep water. Being taller than you, it was chest deep for me, and I lifted you up as you wrapped your arms and legs around me.

I slid my swim trunks down under the water, letting my hard cock out to poke against the thin cloth protecting your pussy. You immediately dropped a hand down to pull your thong aside, sliding your tight cunt lips over the head of my dick. I held you there, only 3 inches of me inside you, sliding you back and forth on that part of my cock. You melted into my arms, burying your face in my neck, nibbling and kissing me.

I spent a few minutes teasing you like that, just sliding in a little bit before pulling back out. You were whimpering quietly into my neck by the time I pulled you hard onto my shaft. You moaned loudly into me, opening your mouth, biting my neck as I filled your pussy. In the water, our movements were slower, but it was much easier to move in all sorts of ways, almost like fucking in weightlessness.

You finally pulled yourself away from my neck, kissing me hard on the lips. "Fuck me Steve," you begged between kisses, your pretty green eyes staring into mine as my cock thrust into your hot cunt. "I want you in my cunt forever."

"Oh, me too Carli," I moaned, our bodies crushing into each other as your tight young hole enveloped my rod. My hands were on your ass, guiding you onto me, and I ran my finger across your asshole. You moaned as my finger touched your back hole.

"Play with my ass again," you whispered, a bit unsure of yourself. I slid one finger inside your tight hole, holding my cock deep inside your cunt. You grunted loudly as I slid first one, then two knuckles deep in your ass. I held myself there for a bit, my hard shaft buried in your tight cunt, and my finger in your hot little ass, letting you get used to the feeling of being so full.

"Oh my god," you moaned, "that is amazing." Your voice was guttural, primal almost. I could feel both your ass and pussy spasm against my flesh, loving and squeezing my parts inside them. Your nails started to dig into my back as I slowly started to fuck you again, my finger still deep in your ass.

"Fuck fuck fuck fuck," you moaned as my cock started sliding in and out off you again. You pulled yourself onto my cock with your legs now, pulling on my ass cheeks with your heels. As your ass relaxed, I started moving my finger in and out as well, and I felt your body shake as I fucked both your lower holes.

"F-f-f-f-uck me," you screamed as I slammed my cock into you and felt your pussy squeeze around me in orgasm. "C-c-c-c-cummmmming," you moaned as your whole body shook around me for a full 30 seconds.

"I do love your cock," you purred, unwrapping your legs and dropping you back to the lake bed as my cock slid out of you, still hard. "Let's go fuck some more on the beach," you said, grabbing my cock and leading me out of the water with it. I followed dutifully, loving the look of your naked ass.

You dropped down on the blanket, releasing my cock and rolling onto your back. Spreading your legs, you looked up at me with your gorgeous green eyes, an excited glint in them. "What do you want to do to your horny schoolgirl?"

I dropped to the blanket on my stomach, my head going straight between your legs. I gasped as I pulled the material of your bikini bottom aside, never tiring of seeing your hot 13 year old cunt close up. You spread your legs wide for me, opening up your little slit and spreading your ass cheeks.

I grabbed a bottle of lubricant from my bag, rubbing some on your puckered ass before coating my finger in the slippery lube. You groaned loudly as my lips sucked in your clit and my index finger slid slowly into your ass. I lapped hungrily at your sweet juices as you pushed your pussy and ass towards me, always wanting more.

Your pussy lips parted for my tongue and your will pulled it inside you. I licked all around your hot little hole before fucking you with my tongue as my finger slid smoothly in and out of your tight asshole. You grabbed the blanket, stuffing it in your mouth to stifle your lustful noises as you thrashed your head around.

I loved the taste of your young cunt, so fresh and tight. I moved up, sucking your clit into my mouth as I sunk two fingers from my other hand into your wet pussy. I had to hold you down as you tried to arch your back, going crazy as I finger fucked your pussy and ass at the same time. You came again, hard, grinding your pussy into my face before collapsing onto the blanket again.

I wasn't done with you yet. I rolled you over on your stomach, lifting your ass in the air as your face stayed on the blanket. I pushed your legs apart, with little resistance from you, spreading your lips seductively. Kneeling behind you, I rubbed the head of my cock against your juicy lips, loving the way you moaned at my touching.

I pushed forward hard, ramming my cock deep inside you, pushing your face a little deeper into the sand. You screamed, your voice only partly muffled by the sand as you felt me suddenly fill you again. I reached down, grabbing your hair as I started fucking you as hard and as deep as I could. You thrust your ass back at me each time I thrust forward, each trying to fuck each other harder.

Reaching around your thigh, my finger started tickling your clit as my shaft sunk itself inside you. I squeezed your clit between my thumb and forefinger, sliding them back and forth, sending you into another orgasm. I loved the feel of your cunt squeezing my hard cock, but I still wasn't ready to cum just yet.

I loved the view of your ass as my thick cock slid all 7 inches into your tight hole. Your pretty cheeks bounced a little as we fucked, and I let go of your hair to grab a cheek in each hand, spreading them wide. I grabbed a bit more lube, sliding my finger back inside your tight ass again.

You went wild with the feel of my finger in your ass while I fucked you. Only a thin skin separated my finger and cock as I slid both into your teen holes. You were writhing beneath me, your face burying deeper in the sand beneath the beach blanket. "Feels so good," you groaned.

The feeling of my finger in your ass against my cock was enough to set me off, and with two more deep thrusts, I buried my cock in you, shooting stream after stream of cock juice into your pussy. As you felt my cum flood you, your body shook in another orgasm, your ass muscles almost breaking my finger with their tightness.

We both collapsed in a heap, me on top of you as I slid out of your holes. I swept your hair away from the back of your neck, planting a long kiss at the base of the skull as we both caught our breath. "I like the feel of your cum leaking out of me," you whispered finally as we both returned to normal.

I grabbed our lunch out of my pack, laying out the sandwiches on the blanket. "I have a surprise for you," I said, chuckling as I reached back inside my pack. I pulled out thermal sleeve and unzipped it, pulling out the bottle of champagne I'd chilled on Friday night, and the two glasses.

We both giggled as I popped the cork, some of the champagne spewing out the top. You quickly put your lips over the top of the bottle, sucking in the champagne until the bubbles spewed out the sides of your mouth. You collapsed onto the blanket, laughing hysterically as you swallowed what champagne you could, and the rest ran down your cheeks.

I poured us a couple glasses, and we both lay down beside each other grabbing a sandwich. "To a wonderful weekend," I said, clinking your glass.

"It was wonderful," you said, nuzzling your butt against my crotch, and taking a sip from your champagne. "I always feel so comfortable with you." We ate our sandwiches, sipping the champagne and chatting about the week to come as we both enjoyed the closeness of each other's body. The lazy buzz of the afternoon, and the exertion of our passion earlier, coupled with the food and champagne left us tired, and we both dozed off in each other's arms.

I woke up first, a few hours later, well into the afternoon. I lay there beside you for awhile, feeling your breathing as you slept, loving the feel of you next to me, not wanting to end the sensation. Finally, I brushed the hair away from your neck and ear, gently kissing your neck. "Time to wake up lover," I whispered, kissing your neck and stroking your hair.

You slowly woke up, and after snuggling for a few more minutes, we both reluctantly started packing up to head back to the car. I could tell you were disappointed the weekend was over, but you knew we had to start getting back. I felt the same way, longing for a lifetime of lying next to you.

We walked slowly back to the car, arm in arm, not caring what anyone else saw or thought. It didn't take long to take down the tent and pack the camp up, and within an hour we were back on the road. Unlike the trip up, we were both awake and alert, and we listened to music and chatted the time away.

"I have to pee," you announced about 2 hours into the trip. I pulled into the next gas station we saw, as I needed to fill the car anyway. I pulled up to the pump, and you jumped out, running inside to find the bathroom. It was a door on the far side of the building, leading into a small single room, and you quickly emerged again with a key and ran around the corner.

I filled the tank, and went inside to pay, grabbing us a couple chocolate bars and drinks. I got back to the car and you still weren't around yet. I wandered around the corner and knocked on the bathroom door. "You OK," I asked through the door as I knocked?

I heard a giggle from the other side of the door, and you opened it, pulling me quickly inside and closing the door again. You dropped to your knees in the small space as I leaned on the sink. You unzipped my pants, quickly pulling my cock out and sliding it into your mouth.

You looked up at me with your gorgeous green eyes as you swallowed my hard shaft, and I loved watching your young lips strain to get around my shaft. I grinned down at you, watching you swallow me, and watching as you closed your eyes, working your mouth up and down my hard shaft. You worked your tongue around me as you fucked me with your mouth.

I could tell you weren't fooling around. There are times when you suck my cock when you want to linger and tease, taking your time to enjoy me. Other times, you devour me like a girl with one thing only on her mind ... sucking my cum out of my cock. Today, after our slutty weekend, kneeling in front of me on the floor of the bathroom, was definitely the latter.

After just a few short minutes, I knew I wouldn't be able to hold out much longer. I pulled my cock out of you, grabbing it with my hand to stroke myself above your face. You looked up at me, your green eyes filled with longing. "I want your cum," you whispered, running your fingers down your cheeks.

I did my best to stifle my grunt as I shot a long stream of cum into your hair and down over your glasses. You grinned widely, watching my second shot arc over your face and land on your forehead. A third shot went in your open mouth before I dripped the rest of my load over your lips and cheeks.

I took the key back while you rushed to the car, not bothering to wipe your face. Within minutes of cumming on your face, we were back on the road again, and you were playing with the white cream on your face. "Best weekend ever," you said through a cum-soaked smile. "Thanks."

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Mark

Sorry, but I couldn't read past the first couple of paragraphs. You wrote this as if you were talking to me. One, I'm not a little girl, and two, I wasn't there. Write in 1st or 3rd person instead.

Godon

I agree with Mark, although a beautiful story, it would have been easier to read as Mark suggested and would have been far more arousing.

Penqwin

Picky bugger Mark! I enjoyed the different delivery and the romantic mood of the entire story. Plenty of word pictures and easy, flowing writing.

Doc

Difficult to read!

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