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"Angela and Debbie Play Ten Questions" by the Warthog
(consensual gangbang) 9, 9, 9
"Angela and Debbie Play Ten Questions" by the Warthog (mailto:warthog@boxtwo.com) Review by The Bear (mailto:thebear@io.com) I don't know if Celeste knew that I was a Warthog fan before she sent me this story, but I feel that I should mention it so that you can take it into account in reading this review. BTW, this story and others by the Warthog are available at his website at This is a good, solid, sexy story, but I'm afraid it is not quite up to the standards of the Warthog's previous work. I noticed more technical mistakes than I have in the past, although part of that may be that I was reading this one for a review and thus paying more attention to details. None of the Warthog's short stories go into great amounts of plot and character development, and this one was no exception, but I thought the development was appropriate for the story that was told. Unfortunately, where this one fell down was in the area that the Warthog usually excels, which is in exciting, sexy narrative of consensual gangbang scenes. This story tells of a 'contest' conducted every month by the members of a college football team. Two members of the team scout the local pickup bars for likely babes, and the ones that can answer all ten questions in the affirmative share $1000 and the privilege of servicing the whole team at a gangbang party. On this particular evening Angela and Debbie pass the test and go back to the athletic dorm to meet the team. There is a hot sequence of Debbie making it with the narrator in the car on the way to the dorm, and then going 'around the world' with another guy when she gets to the dorm. Then the whole gangbang with the rest of the team is reduced to a simple summary of events in four paragraphs, and the story is over. The sex that is here is hot and well-told, but Angela and the football team might as well not have been included. This would have been an exciting story of one girl with two guys, but it simply doesn't live up to the promise of its beginning. I still liked it, and I'd recommend it for just about any reader -- hey, I gave it a 9:9:9 rating -- it just didn't meet my expectations. Ratings for "Angela and Debbie Play Ten Questions": Athena (technical merit): 9 Venus: (plot and character): 9 Bear: (appeal to reviewer): 9 |