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"Border Crossing" (MF MF) by Fenris (strip search & rape)
8, 9, 9
"Border Crossing" by Fenris (mailto:fenriskw@aol.com) Review by The Bear (mailto:thebear@io.com) This story is about two American girls on vacation in Europe. As their train makes a night-time crossing from Switzerland into Italy, a guard comes to their compartment and finds two joints that one of the girls has in her backpack. He calls another guard to the compartment and they search the girls' luggage, then the girls themselves. Guess what - the guards start groping the girls during the body frisk, then strip them and have sex with them, and of course the girls both enjoy every minute of it. The story is written from the point of view of Paige, one of the two girls involved. The only problem with using this single POV comes when the sex begins and Paige has to do double duty, narrating her own experience and also watching her friend Julie and describing what is happening to her. Paragraph by paragraph the narrative begins to flip back and forth between Paige-as-Paige and Paige- watching-Julie. At times it was difficult to determine what was being done to whom. (It didn't help that the guards had no names or even labels -- just "the guard that was fucking Paige" and "the guard that was fucking Julie" -- even calling them "the tall guard" and "the short guard" would have been some improvement.) There is precious little plot or character development, other than Paige being afraid of the guards and then deciding that she is enjoying "the strongest sexual experience of her young life." On the other hand, there isn't room for much development in this story -- it is all action, crammed into a fairly short span of time. The level of development is appropriate to the story. Here is where the "appeal to reviewer" rating may be helpful to someone trying to decide whether or not to read this story. Despite the problems in describing who does what to whom, the story does get pretty hot as Paige gets bent over her bunk and boinked from behind, all the while watching "the other guard" slide his big fat cock first into Julie's pussy and then between her large breasts. Bottom- line, if I happen to run across this story in a repost or something a month from now, I'd probably consider it worth my time to read it again. If you find any of the story description in this review even mildly exciting, you'll probably like the story as well. Ratings for "Border Crossing": Athena (technical merit): 8 Venus (plot and character): 9 Bear (appeal to reviewer): 9 |