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"Camping Out" by Val White (kiddy orgy) 8, 6, 4
"Camping Out" by Val White (e-mail val72@hotmail.com). Guest Review by BillyG. I have nothing against a formulaic method of writing. Hell, at root, most stories follow some sort of outline and many are very successful. No, I don't object to a formula per se, just one that's too simplistic perhaps. The story "Camping Out" appears to adopt the belief that if one is good, two is better, and three is better yet. It's the numbers' game of writing a story about sex. The fallacy, of course, lies in the fact that more people involved in sexual acts are not more sexy. Too, it stretches credibility when we're asked to embrace the scenario of three, 13-year-old boys, each with four-inch dicks, all of whom love to get it on together. That they can masturbate each other, suck each other, and even fuck each other in the ass, strains our capacity to identify a bit more. Then we're given some relief to learn that they aren't really homosexual because they don't kiss one another! Whew! Had me worried for a moment. Too humdrum? Enter three, 13-year-old girls in this `camping out' story of seduction and sexual abandon. They too have discovered the convenience as well as the pleasure of same-sex activities. But don't worry, they're really there to get it on with the boys. Gosh, I didn't mean to give away the entire plot! Oh well. It's the action, not the plot anyway. So, what do we have, aside from the formulaic `more is better' trap, coupled with round-heeled chicks? Not much. This type of story would be better told were it about characters that appeared real, in a less contrived situation and with some elements of seduction. Ratings for "Camping Out" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 6 BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 4 |