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"Transparent Like Glass" by sfmaster (criminal sex) 9, 10, 9
"Transparent Like Glass" by sfmaster@worldnet.att.net. Our hero tends bar, and a lovely lady customer makes a pass. After a while she proposes the pair of them commit a big robbery she's planned, The lovers will make their fortunes and leave the country together. It doesn't turn out like that. The sex is hot and straight, though oddly one-sided. >Unlike the quick rutting of our earlier sex, this time I slowed the tempo >even as I raised her to greater heights of passion and orgasm. The hero obviously belongs to the man as violinist, woman as violin school of lovemaking - whereas I like to fiddle about on my own account. The sex is the least important part. I find this story difficult because I'm still not sure why I like it. Raymond Chandler is, in my view, one of the great writers of this century. And there is something, just a tiny smidgen, of his laconic beat in this - though none of his lyricism. And yet is this trace any more than the effect Chandler's work has had on every PI narrative since? Who can tell? Not this reviewer. I've read this story three times slowly, and I can tell you what's wrong with it, but I'm still not sure what's right. Though there's a lot more right than wrong. In some ways this story is very cliched, but it worked for me. Which is weird in itself, because there are a number of typos, and errors. Glitches in formatting, typos, misspellings - all these things usually put me off my stride as a reader but they didn't bother me much this time. The author clearly can produce perfect copy, just hasn't in this instance. I sympathize - I've done it too in my impatience to post, but I've had to take a mark off. I think it's the pace that works so well. There's a rhythm to the story, and this works. And the level of detail is well judged. I could see it unrolling like a movie. Kim Basinger as the heroine. Gerard Depardieu as the hero, maybe. Choose your own cast, but you get the picture. Along these means streets stumbles a flummoxed reviewer. Ratings for "Transparent Like Glass" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 Bronwen (appeal to reviewer): 9 - not sexy, but I liked it. |