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"Public Offering" by Mr Easy (public humiliation) 5, 3, 1
"Public Offering" by Mr Easy (mr_ez@hotmail.com). Three of my guest reviewers read this story and then declined to write a review, and so I decided to do it myself. This story is the work of a first-time author who earnestly wants my advice. The most productive thing I can say, Mr Easy, is that your writing will probably improve. Either that or you'll stop writing. The story comes across as the sort of thing Beavis and Butthead would think of: "Hey, let's write a story about a woman who gets publicly humiliated and really likes it." "Yeah, cool! And we can have people fuck her!" Then B&B rush their thoughts onto paper and post the first draft. So we have a story in which a guy ties his lover to a "captor" and lets some punks have their way with her. Afterwards, the guy exclaims, " "HOW WERE THOSE TEENAGED COCKS? UGH! HOW DID YOU LIKE BEING THEIR LITLE SLUT?" UGH, indeed. This basic plot does not HAVE to result in a bad story. Delta's "The Whipping Post" is a story with a similar plot that received straight 10s from me in CR 189. The main differences were (1) Delta's story was more literate, and (2) Delta presented the plot as a plausible but startling series of events. This one comes across as suggesting that everybody knows this would be fun, when in fact few people know that would be the case. Ratings for "Public Offering" Athena (technical quality): 5 Venus (plot & character): 3 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1 |