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"My Weekend in Portland" by Charles Thain (Tender/Hot D/S sex)
10, 8, 8
"My Weekend in Portland" by Charles Thain (okiquit@hotmail.com). Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com). "A happy 'slave' is better than a surly 'slave' any day." And how do we keep our slave happy? By giving her orgasm after earth-shattering, pulse-pounding, neighbors-calling-the-cops, life- changing orgasm. OOPS got ahead of myself. Actually the story codes said simply "MF, FF, MFF" and it was indeed all of that but it neglected to mention the "M/F" was really "Light M/f D/S" (f being and adult submissive female). Mr. K is working in San Francisco. He used to work in Portland before his boss, Ruth, saw him as a threat (personally, sexually, and professional) and had him downsized. When Mr. K visits Portland to see to one of his clients he visits his old office when looking up an old friend and bumps into Ruth. Mr. K doesn't know Ruth had him downsized, but he learns about it when she tells him over dinner. It seems Ruth has a conscious and the dastardly deed has been eating her up inside. She offers to make it up to him by being his slave for forty-eight hours. Up until this point (page 3 of a 50-page story) I was groovin' right along enjoying a remarkably good read. At the mention of "slave" though alarm bells went off (Danger Will Robinson Danger!) and I groaned anticipating 47 more pages of what might as well be sex with one of those "real dolls". "Don't even breathe unless I tell you. 'Yes Master.' OK now bend over. 'Yes Master.' Spread your pussy for me. 'Yes Master, anything you say master'." What followed the offer really did surprise me. Ruth was hardly the one dimensional sex toy I expected. Quite the contrary! Ruth was an even more dynamic character than the narrator! The author managed to make Ruth's personality consistent with her offer. This wasn't done in one huge rationalization blurb like so many similar stories do, but was revealed gradually as an element to Ruth's rather dynamic personality. We find over the course of the story that Ruth has had some pretty unpleasant experiences with sex and has managed to repress herself into chastity. She's repressed sex, but not her drive. Ruth is a lusty woman, in every sense of the word! The effect of this remarkably manages to contain all the elements of a first-time event for Ruth (and all the pleasures of dawning sexuality) at the hands of a very experienced lover. Did I say lover? In a D/S story? Actually I did. Mr. K is extraordinarily sensitive to his partner's wants, needs, and desires. The sex scenes read like scenes out of any "vanilla" romance. We really aren't reminded who's boss and who's not until AFTER Ruth wakes up the neighbors with her orgasmic screams, and then only with the lightest touch. And what sex scenes! Lovingly, painstakingly, vividly, awesomely described passion that can heat up even the coldest - er well you get the idea. This is a long story and it is almost paragraph to paragraph non-stop-sex, but the variation seems endless. This really is one hot story. Right about now unless you've sneaked a peek at the scores you're probably thinking triple ten territory. So was I actually. Up until chapter nine I would have marked the story so without hesitation. Ruth's no-longer repressed, Mr. K and Ruth find blissful happiness and live happily ever after. That would have been a triple ten ending to a triple ten story. What happened I think is that the author looked at his story and said to himself, "Damn this is good." He probably had loads of fun writing it -- it certainly looked as if he had fun. And he decided to keep right on writing. There's a reason we get the words "And they lived happily ever after," after Sleeping Beauty is saved by Prince Charming. No one really wants to hear how Prince Charming dragged Sleeping Beauty off to her best friend and got her all mixed up in an improbable threesome. Well maybe a few people, but I don't think Disney would have made as much money with that particular ending. Up until chapter nine this story did the seemingly impossible for me and made the story believable enough for me to suspend my disbelief and just kick back and enjoy a great read. When Mr. K discovers Ruth's fantasy about a female coworker he takes her over to the coworker's apartment and the story breaks the trust between reader and story by creating a scene so improbable that not even the author's otherwise flawless writing skills could overcome the reader's problems. The illusion broken beyond repair, the story ends on a sour note I suspect for most people. Do yourself a favor and definitely look up this story. Read the first eight chapters and then tell yourself "and they lived happily ever after." If you do that you'll be getting a triple ten story. Otherwise this is probably what you're going to find: Ratings for "My Weekend in Portland" Athena (technical quality): 10 -- Very, very readable. Venus (plot & character): 8 -- Improbable middle, very weak ending. Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 8 -- This could have been a perfect story! |