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"My Cousin Michelle" by Danny (incest) 9.5, 8, 6
"My Cousin Michelle" by Danny (danny387@aol.com -- no longer valid). Guest review by Fiddler. The narrator comes from a "poor white trash" family and decides to get out of that life. He earns grades enough to get him into a good college and puts his past almost behind him. Then, in his junior year, he visits home one more time and falls for his 16-year-old first cousin. He takes her to LA, initiates her into sex, and sends her home on the bus. She grows out of the relationship, and he is left with both his heart and his self-image broken. A lot of this story rings true. (The girl loves him, but also sees him as part of the "Baywatch"-induced glamour of California.) Commander Jameson reposted it as a classic. So why doesn't it work for me? It isn't only that there is a long time between fucks. A more serious problem is the lack of expressed emotion. Screwing a 16-year-old first cousin is part of the hillbilly life that the narrator tells us that he has rejected. We aren't shown that rejection, however, merely told about it. Friar Dave and The (retired) Bear could get away with thousands of words working up to the first penetration. But they communicated (and FD communicates) the ambivalence of sexual-attraction/shame-at-being-attracted. And, when the deed was done, they communicated the emotions of both parties. Danny doesn't do any of this for me. Ratings for "My Cousin Michelle": Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 8 Fiddler (appeal to this reviewer): 6 |