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"Mike" by Emerson Laken-Palmer (incest) 9, 8, 7
"Mike" by Emerson Laken-Palmer (posted by Sxjames@aol.com). For Kimberly Mike has been not only brother and babysitter, but also her applied sex educator. Whereas Mom has told Kimberly that tickling herself in the nasty spot is dirty, Mike has been most agreeable about helping her with her finger dexterity and has even given her access to his own naughty ticklish spot. Mike has been responsible for most of the tingling in which Kimberly's body has engaged in its young lifetime. At various times Mike makes abortive attempts to reform, but each time Kimberly explains to him what a good big brother he is or fondles his cock, and Mike resumes his industrious instruction. Mike makes some fundamental biological mistakes. For example, he confuses sperm with semen and he probably doesn't know a zygote from a gamete. In addition, he makes a classical post hoc error when he downloads a picture of a woman sucking on a guy's cock and explains to Kimberly that the woman got those big ticks by sucking the guy's penis. However, Mike manages to cover the basics with Kimberly pretty well, and before long she's an accomplished pre-teen slut. And hey! Maybe Mike was right: Kimberly's breasts DID seem to get bigger and better after she started having sex with Mike regularly. The grammar in this story is deliberately bad, to simulate the written expression of an 11-year-old non-rocket-scientist. This sort of style can be difficult, but the author brings it off nicely. The trick is to appear to be a bit on the less-than-eloquent side while still being clear about what's going on. The story ends with this disclaimer: "The purpose of this story was to make the reader aware of the problems and traumas caused by incest and be aware of its physical and emotional effects on young people." That's a valid point, and I am happy to know that the author doesn't think kiddy incest is a good thing. However, I really don't think the story succeeded in having the impact the author described. In fact, unless a person read the disclaimer or had a prior insight (based on moral principles or real-life experience) that the activities described in the story were potentially harmful, that person would likely conclude that the author intended this to be a story of the fun-filled activities that can occur when children grow up in a laissez-faire sexual environment. Ratings for "Mike" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 |