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"Get with the Program" by Phil Phantom (incest, pedophillia,
humiliation, and spanking) 9, 9, - / 10, 8, - / 10, 7, -
"Get with the Program" by Phil Phantom (slutmissy@hotmail.com). Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com). Before I begin the review, I need to warn you that the subject matter of this story falls outside my personal tastes and preferences. The story contains incest (mother/son, mother/daughter, father/daughter, brother/sister), pedophilia, humiliation, and spanking. There is no appeal to reviewer for me with this story; and so I will analyze it based on technical quality and plot alone, with no recommendation to either read or avoid this story. "Get with the Program" is actually three stories with the same title. All the stories revolve around a central plot: A family arrives at a camp where the man and woman are expected to "service" the guests; in reality the son and daughter are expected to do this as well. What Phil has done with this story is explore differing tones and slightly different scenarios. In a sense the author is playing what-ifs with the same general idea: What if the family decides to go with the flow, what if the mother is reluctant, what if the circumstances are more life-threatening? This is actually a pretty good idea; and although the possibility is there for the reader to get bored, each story is different enough to keep things interesting. Plot #1: Karen and Bill Smith have taken a new job at a camp. Their duties involve fucking anyone, anytime, any way a guest wants it. That may be their job, but the story focuses specifically on breaking in their daughter Jenny to handle these duties as well. Jenny is the only one who resists these strange new ideas and her parents' inexplicable new attitude, at least at first. Eventually everyone relaxes and has a good time. The story is fairly hard to read at first with many "he said," "I said." and few transitions to smooth the reading; but the reading does get easier later on as the author warms up. The plot serves only as an excuse for the sex, which is not necessarily a bad thing in a sex story. Plot #2: Again this is the same general plot, but this time the story focuses on the stepmother, Karen. Karen is the reluctant one this time and attempts to shield Jenny from the harsh facts of life. Unfortunately Jenny is tagging along during Karen's physical, which gets extraordinarily physical when Karen's examiner starts royally fucking her. For those who like pain and punishment this story ends with a rather explicit cunt spanking. There were no false starts with this plot variation, and so the reading remained easy. The first plot offered a conclusion by allowing a change in one of the characters. That gives plot #1 a sense of finality and closure. In this story Karen begins reluctant and ends reluctant -- there is no sense of closure. Again the plot serves as an excuse for the sex, and again this is not necessarily a bad thing in a sex story. Plot #3: In both of the previous plots Karen begins the story relating how she was beaten by Helen, the proprietor. This third story begins with a first hand account of that. As in Plot #2, Karen plays her part reluctantly, this time with more urgency and terror, again at least at first. This time the family is forced to perform for the guests, beginning with auctioning off Jenny's clothing piece by piece to the highest bidder in a public auction (something which Jenny finds humiliating enough to inspire tears). The subsequent shows involve the husband/father taking Jenny's virginity and Karen fucking her son, for the audience, of course. Again the reading was smooth. There is actually very little explicit sex in this one, the thrill coming only in the humiliation and power plays. The author did a fairly good job at stressing the urgency and terror Karen was feeling at the beginning of the story, but in a single sentence at the end undoes this without adequate buildup to explain the abrupt shift in Karen's attitude. If the last sentence had been deleted this would have been a far more consistent story; and that one sentence is the difference between a 7 and an 8 in plot & character. As I conclude, I feel compelled to point out the author uses no blank lines between paragraphs and dialog lines. Please, guys - space is not a valuable commodity to be hoarded. A single blank line between paragraphs and dialog lines makes for a far more readable story. A final note before we move on to raw scores. Appeal to reviewer does influence Venus. I suggest you use the text of this review to base your decision on whether or not to read these stories rather than the numerical scores. Also, since I do consider these three separate stories, I have included three separate scores, the first score is for the first story, the second score is for the second story, and the third score for the third story. Athena (technical quality): 9, 10, 10 Venus (plot & character): 9, 8, 7 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): (This space intentionally left blank) |